My Mind Can't Take Much More - Comments

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I'm just amazed by how well this story is done. It's very hard to come by a fic of any sort to really get yourself lost to. I was a bit skeptical, when I opened the story to see it was Johnny Depp fanfic, to be quite frank, never in my life had I wanted to read a story with Johnny included, but this just swept me away.
The characters just seem so detail, vivid... real. It's easy to get myself lost in this story. Keep doing the great job.

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I really liked this! I've never read a johnny depp fic. I liked how slow everything was going. It wasn't one of those "Boy meets girl, falls hopelessly in love" fics. I loved your characters and the way you described them. Also the way you described their moms death and its effects was amazing. Great job!

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Hello, just another comment swapper passing through. Personally, I'm over Johnny Depp, but I can say I've never come across a story starring him. But nonetheless, this story was great. You write beautifully. Everything flowed together. Good job, doll :)

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I seriously... I can't even. You're description, you're diction, the fact that it's Johnny Depp; everything about this story is perfect. I seriously love this and it's probably one of my favorite stories I've read so far. You're definitely getting recommended and subscribed! Kudos to you for your excellent work! :)

Hiya, here from comment swap!

I must say when I saw the pictures of Johnny Depp I got a little excited. Because I've only seen one other person who wrote Johhny Depp fan fiction (a lot of it), and all of it was so freaking amazing so I hoped that yours would be too.

It was, I assure you. :) Your descriptions are just plain gorgeous, especially this paragraph;

I can say that I have a love and hate relationship with this town. Sometimes, I can't stand it. Other times, I never want to leave. The constant war that I had going on between my mixed emotions sometimes took a toll on my body and mind. There were days that I would just sit here in my worn-out, small bedroom and just stare. I would star into nothing, sometimes into time and space itself. I think my heart truly lies somewhere where the ocean meets the sky, where the stars walk along the land, and where the moon and the sun dance together to the beat of their heartbeats. I believe that these places exist, and that you can find them if you just use your imagination. For now though, my head is just drifting off somewhere in the space continuum, filled with the stories of my past lives.

I couldn't decide which sentence to focus on, because each one was equally beautiful, so I just chose the whole thing!

Your spelling and grammar is impeccable, and you are very good at writing interactions between people. I know that's an odd thing to focus on, but it's a vital part of a fantastic story and some people lack the talent to write dialogue fluently, and that ends up making the relationship between two characters seem awkward and not very realistic. Yours is very realistic, and I can imagine it so vividly it's awesome.

“You ok?” he asked with a small chuckle.

“Yeah... I'm fine.” I could feel my cheeks become more red by the second. He just looked at me and smiled.

“I'm assuming you live in Delavan. Just give me directions to the house,” he said..

We soon took a series of turns to get to my house. He stopped outside and turned off the engine. I looked at him and said thank you. He replied with “You're welcome” and I got out. He soon yelled out the window as I was walking up on my porch.

“Hey! Maybe I'll see you around. I'll be in town for a while.”

“We'll see, Johnny,” I said with a smirk.

Just an example of the brilliant dialouge used. I especially liked the last line. :3

Anyway, I really really enjoyed this, and I'm glad I found it! You're a great writer, no doubt. I've recommended it!

Commenter swapper. I just want to say that, when I saw Johnny Depp, I was a bit... confused. I don't think I've ever seen a Johnny Depp story on this website. But this story is amazing; your writing, the plot, hell, even the layout is amazing!
This is one of the times I thank god for comment swap; I never would have found this otherwise, and this is fucking amazing. I hope you can update soon.

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wow, when i saw johnny depp i was like tha fuck?
but i read on and this actually sounds interesting. you're very detailed in your descriptions, which makes it fun to read. you're a great writer
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Thank god for comment swap! Johnny depp, I have a sweet spot for him. Your layout it quite simply and easy on the eyes but that doesn't usually bother me. Your story is very discriptive, and I like that. I felt as though I was there and watching everything unfold. It's very easy to read and to concentrate on. It's really worth reading, good work!

The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!

The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!

This is a great story! Extremely well detailed with the beginning and well written and very descriptive. I especially like the sort of back story at the beginning. I started just reading but the beginning pulled me in and just got through reading. Great job, keep it up!

Overall, I think the story is definetly good. There were a few mistakes I think, but nothing that really took away from the story as a whole, you know? I loved the small town thing, and I was definetly impressed by the description of her dreamer-y attitude, it was very cool.

Recommended.

Normally I have something better to say, but to be completely honest I found a total of like, three mistakes. All of them are so minuscule you could barely tell. Things like a word being switched around by mistake. One thing that I would like to point out however is the way you just kind of dump the information on us in the first chapter, it's a lot to take it.

You're story is wonderfully written with just enough detail without it being over the top. The characters are relate-able but the conversation seems a bit fake at this point, not horribly fake but just enough to make it a bit awkward.

I'm in love with the layout.

Overall I think you're on the right track and I'm interested in seeing where this goes! :)

Please excuse me as I squeal and faint and then continue to seize. I'm in love with this. I adore Johnny Depp anyway, but MY CUPCAKES.

Please, please marry me. Actually, don't, because that spot is for Mr. Depp, but seriously, amazing.

Your style is fluent and complex and there are virtually no grammatical errors. The plot is going somewhere and I look forward to it!

The only thing I wish were different would have to be the layout. The blue stopping halfway across the page is mildly distracting, and I wish it went the full breadth of the page.

Anywho, I look forward to more! <3

Pardon my French but...FUCKING YES. I'm in love with Johnny Depp. I wanna sob because there's actually a fan fic about him! How can I critique something so absolutely wonderful?!
I love you detail first off. Even though a couple times I had to read over what I'd read for it to process in my slow mind lol.
Hazel is pretty deep and I hope her voice gets better as the story goes on. Never make her too cliche-ish though, for it will pull away from her character. Because I will be continuing to read.
Thanks for this! Update soon please!

I adore Johnny Depp and pretty much anything to do with him *.* And I agree with most of the people who have commented in that I don't think I have seen another fanfiction with him as the main, but this is really well written, you should be proud :) I love your descriptions as well!

While I do love Johnny Depp I've never read, or even seen, a fanfic about him, but I really like this and the way it's written even if there are a few grammar errors. It did lose my attention a few times, but I'm pretty sure I have ADD so I blame it on that and I'm subscribing to this story!!! :)

Beautiful layout, though I do suggest making the font a bit bigger.
As for your writing, you are an amazing writer. You go into great detail with everything. I love how you go in depth about the town and don't just brief over it. You really allowed for me to paint a vivid mental picture. I really do love their introduction as well. It's very different, and somewhat awkward; it flows well. I'm subbing, I cannot resist. This is beautiful. (:

Good start. I was kind of confused at first, because I didn't know exactly what the whole thing was about, but it soon made sense. This is the first time I've seen or read Johnny Depp fan fic, so this will be interesting. You're writing is amazing. Imagery is great I can pretty much picture everything in my head. The only problem I have is the font, it's a little too small for me, but other than that everything is really good. Good luck with the story!!

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