Bad Babysitter - Comments

I was nearly past halfway through your story on the past comment, I really do mean it that I really like your idea, story style and that it really draws me in. It's very real, like, the drug themes, so on. Your grammar did improve with the later chapters. A couple of mistakes is fine, everyone makes them, but yeah.

This story really draws me in and I really enjoy it, but you have terrible grammar. Please edit your work - no text language, use commas correctly, capitalise the beginning of each sentence, be aware of tenses, the differences in between words (you're/your, etc), start a new paragraph per new speaker. Your story is that kind that it draws me in and I'm able to read it and enjoy it, but seriously. Grammar is important.

Just go back, read it over, edit it and it will really improve your story. I can even help with that.

It's not that your idea and writing style is bad, it's pretty good, to the point that I can read it and oversee the grammar - which is a hard feat to do with not so good grammar. Props for that. It's just constructive criticism simply for improving your writing.

aw:(

She has them both smitten. I can't wait to read more.

oh le sighs, I don't know why? But I wanted him (Matt) to stay with Caitlin. *le crap*

HMM what will happen??? Update soon lease!!!!

Ahhh. I wonder what's gonna happen

You're back!!! After a month... You're motherfucking back!
Oh fuck! Now what!? .__.
As always feelings scattered everywhere!

Update please!

dude fackin update

this story seriously annoys the shit out of me- her blunt fucking foolishness.why the fuck would u stay huh?who purposely inflects pain on themselves? but i always read it ugh i cant stop!! it so annoying that i gotta know what the fool does *sigh*

With every move I'm seriously believing she should leave .-.
I don't know what to think anymore!! .-.

Feelings everywhere!!

She really needs tog et away from them. She probably wont but its best.

i cat wait to see what happens:)
im so addicted to this story. i really wana know wo she ends up with
im deffiently team zacky
i lov that she turned down bria. i actually didnt see him becomin a dick haha
well update soon cause ima be needin a fix soon haha

I'm seriously starting to believe that she should sent them both to krakozia! and stay alone!
I mean they're huge douche bags! I don't know who should I believe Matt? Brian? Zacky?
Nonsense!! .-.

((:

She needs someone outside of these fucked up guys to save her. Zachy better keep Matt away from her!!

So much in one chapter! I hope Zacky keeps her safe. Anyways keep up the good work! Cant wait for more!

Shit! THIS IS A REALITY SHOW!
So, when is the next chapter!? SOON, I hope!
*le faints* too many emotions and things going on!!

Love this story!! Cant wait for more! Update soon please!