Pretty Young Thing - Comments

I'm so sad you're not writing this anymore. I just found it and immediately fell in love with it. Keep writing, please?

I never knew that the play boy millionaire would be a good father type? haha.
I love it so fair and I can't wait for Mr sexy caption America to appear
Can't wait to read more

hehehehe i love jarvis so so much. i know, not an actual person. don't care, jarvis is amazing. i love the story by the way. i love your story, can't wait for updates. :)

I will not mention the spelling and sentence structure since it had already been stated but I will examine your writing.
Your writing style is very unique, and appears that you have not been writing for a very long time yet. You have a great amount of talent and potential. You possess a great skill in writing and within a few years and a couple more stories I feel you will become an even better writer, producing stories at an expertise level. Best of luck.

First off, you have an interesting premise going on here! I love your summary, it absolutely drew me in. I can imagine all the clashes Stark and Captain America are going to get into over Vivienne.

However, some concrit I have for you:

You misspelled “Prologue”. In addition, you tend to miss out some punctuation in your work. Some of the sentence structuring is also a bit off. For example, “Reading and writing are my favorite past times, and possibly the only things that kept my sane all threw my high school years” I think you meant - kept me sane through my high school years. I suggest having a beta. I know how it feels like working on something for too long, and sometimes you tend to miss out more stuff when you’re working on your own material. Having a beta would help you identify some of the mistakes you overlook.

That aside, I really look forward to your next update! Hoping to see some Father-daughter screaming sessions soon. *smirks* *subscribed*