The Universe in a Nutshell - Comments

You certainly tell the story in a unique way and I am intrigued to continue reading. I hope you will continue it.

I love this story, please continue it. :)

Yep, I am pretty well confused about the plot of the story. I don't get it at all. But the little parts that I do kind of understand seem rather interesting. I wish you the best of luck with the rest of this story.

Yep, I am definitely confused about the plot of the story. I don't get it at all. But the little parts that I do seem rather interesting. I wish you the best of luck with the rest of this story.

I like the way the story is set up its different and that definitely catches my attention. It kind of reminds me of the way the Crank, Glass, Identical series are if you know what I am talking about by Ellen Hopkins. I can see that this is clearly a memory a story she is telling again. I like it keep writing!

The summary was sort of confusing and the way you write is definitely different but, and do not be offended, but I have my concerns about this structure and the overall plot, which I find extremelly depressing. And the name of the character is Raven, which is a huge turn off for me. Maybe I don't enjoy this because it's something I would never write myself and it seems weird to me. But don't get me wrong it's your story and I encourage to keep your style. Not everyone's gonna love it, but it's yours and unique. I respect your work, you are definitely not afraid to step outside the box.

I have to say that I like the format as well, and to be completely unoriginal, yes, it makes me think of a poem format too. I don't know if you've read the books like Crush, the poem books, but it's kind of like that. Except... different.

i like the format, and the way you write, its poem-y and choppy but it works, and even with the short line format there is variation of sentence length and stuff which keeps my attention. Its great, keep writing, the only thing is the colour of the writing makes it hard for me to read (but that is probably my eye sight) but its great :-)

I'm reallying enjoying it so far. I love the way you've written it. I was scared for a momment when you said it wouldn't be written in normal paragraph but i really like it. I love the quotes at the start. I really am looking forward to reading more. ~Subscribed

I love the set up, and I love stories that have this setup. I only wish that there were more like this. I love the pace of this, and I think you have a nice contrast of pace and detail, and no grammar mistakes! I think I will subscribe to read more about Lance.

I like this poem-esque,.choppy way you write. It keeps the story simple without ruining a single detail. In fact I'd say you describe emotions and situations better with few words than some people do with tons of them. Ah, I love this. *subscribe*

It's very interesting almost like a poem. You should continue and the way it was formatted confused me a bit but now that I look closely at it...it reminds me of poem haha. Continue please :)