Two Bags - Comments

The first thing I must comment on is the layout. It is absolutely beautiful and suits your story.
Second of all, this was absolutely.... I don't think I can describe how amazing this was in words alone.
It was so heartfelt and touching. Absolutely beautiful.

Thank you for creating such a lovely piece.

This is beautiful. I can't express what a delight it was to read this especially this late at night when I'm just itching for a beautiful piece of writing to read.

You completely eased my heart and this was just amazing. Well done,

I love this! This really touched me. I love how you really put yourself in the character's shoes and made her sound so innocent. The use of short sentences really made me believe that an innocent young girl was telling the story. I absolutely love it! -A

This actually touched me. I loved it. You use a lot of short sentences and I tend to do that. It's a writing technique that I think some people don't really enjoy but I love them. Sometimes descriptions need to be just very short to express them. I have to agree with the comment below, "beautiful", is the best word to describe this.

Wow, Sani. This is so beautiful. It really touched my soul.<3