Sorry for Party Rocking - Comments

@ mrsbored
Sorry that it isn't about Crosby. If I do decide to continue my hockey fanfic writing, you won't see anything involving a romantic relationship with him. As it is, I'm not a Crosby fan in the least. I couldn't possibly write about him. I'm sorry.

As a hockey fan I must admit that I was a little disappointed when I first realised that this wasn't a Sid fanfic. But I soon changed my mind and after reading a few chapters and I am now intrigued to find out more about LMFAO. I am at times a little confused by the POV which makes it a little difficult to immediately understand the story, but I still find that I like the storyline and I'm curious to see how it evolves.

Hello, I don't really know anything about LMFAO so it's not really my story and I only got till the 3rd chapter.
I must say that sometimes the story was a little vague. For example in ch. 3, when she talks to the bouncer and sky walks up. I felt that it wasn't very clear who showed up it became clear after she already started talking to this person. I would ad something like "She turned around seeing Sky standing there." Or something.

Further more the sentence "Will fate that these girls get with the guys of LMFAO or not?" Isn't right. And I think the very first sentence isn't either.

Lastly I would put who's POV it is (Stephanie's of Alicia's) with each chapter. To make it more clear for the reader.

OOooh. Sidneys a sly dog. But it didnt work! Haha i didn't think i'd like this but it's pretty good :) Its kind of funny just considering its the LMFAO boys. The theme is really cool too. I looove the back ground. And ooo why cant she just hang out with them jeez sidney chill yourself x)