I Wish - Comments

*Comment Swap*
Although I am not the biggest One Direction fan, and I won't continue reading this, I like your writing style. I think you have a good start to this story. The font is a little small for my liking, but that may just be that I am blind! haha. I like how the dialouge flowed smoothly, and you could tell exactly how he felt. One piece of advice that I will give you is to try not to use I as much at the start of a lot of sentences. I know it's hard when it's a 1st person story, but it would flow better!

D'AAAAAWWWWW LOUIS!!!!! I want to hug your story...if that's possible! Likehe tells her how he feels and almost kisses her?! He's mental!

'Like the way Zayn loves his mirror' Hahaha, that part made me laugh. Aww, I'm so happy he confessed his feelings for her. I can't wait til the next update :DD UPDATE SOON <33

(from comment swap)

I know it's lame to talk about the layout during a review but yours is pretty snazzy, very clean, crisp and easy to read.

First things first, I hate one direction, if comment swap hadn't brought me here I would've avoided it like the plague but for the sake of comment swap I honest to god read it.

You certainly know how to write, I could find no spelling or grammatical errors. Over all, you are a good writer.

Now I must run away.

Awww that was so so cute! I can't wait to see what happens at the park!! :DDD

Yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeesh! It's here! Ugh! It's like a cliff hanger! I shall be on my toes til you update again!

Wow, so much emotion weaved into this... this perfection. At first I had no idea why I kept going page by page into the fan fiction, but I came across this story, and I thought to myself 'I Wish'... now this could have been about a whole lot of things, but I Wish, is perfection in it's own right. Applaude yourself, I'm off to subscribe.

Aww I really like it so far! I can't wait for you to update :DD

Yayz! You updated! Rawr! Loved it, more?

This was amazing! It was worth the wait! Lovely update!

I am certainly not a fan of fan fiction but I stumbled upon this and was immediately eager to read. I love one direction and the way this was executed was brilliant. I relate to what Louis is feeling so much at the moment and the way you wrote it couldn't have been farther from the truth. Excellent job. :)

This is great! I'd love to read more! :D

Hi! So I got this story off of comment swapper and I must say that I think this story has some major potential and could definitely become a masterpiece. I like the original plot and the way you portray the characters was very clever. I did notice a few spelling/grammar mistakes such as: ‘He intvited’ should be invited and ‘practially everyone we knew’ should be practically. There are a few more and if you want, I would be more and happy to mention them to you. Just shoot me a private message or something. Also, I think that if you focused a bit more on the details of the stories and the emotions, it would really make this story pop. Please continue on writing because you have talent!

Omg I could feel the emotion in Louis' voice. Now I can't wait for the 2nd chapter.

So I absolutely adore One Direction. With saying this, I do want to let you know that the red on purple is a little hard to read, so you may want to change it. My eyes are sorta bouncing all over the place. But other than the layout, I absolutely adore this story :)