Meeting Alexis Stark. - Comments

  • lildragongirl

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    Just a little side note. Steve/Captain America was in World War II not the 1st one. :)
    September 21st, 2012 at 01:50pm
  • Arcapello

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    Update soon!!
    July 17th, 2012 at 11:32pm
  • long leather wings.

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    I really love this story and the way it's going already, but I feel like it's progressing to quickly. I'm definitely subscribing to see what happens and to see you develop your characters. I hope something blooms between Steve and Alexis~ Also, you might want to read over your chapters before you post them. There weren't any grammatical errors that made the story hard to read, they were just silly ones that could have been caught had you skimmed through it before posting; same goes for any spelling errors. All in all, I really like this story and your layout is absolutely beautiful. Keep up the hard work and please update soon! :D
    July 2nd, 2012 at 03:28am
  • Captainamerica

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    Thanks (and yes, I am quite aware of the unrealistic-ism haha)

    And I have such a problem with Mary Sue characters, but I think it kinda fixes itself as it goes on and more character development.. or at least I think so. If you have any tips on making her less 'mary sue', I'd love to hear them! I'm always up for learning more and advancing my writing. Especially since I'm not very good, haha.

    And thanks for subscribing, I hope you enjoy!
    June 26th, 2012 at 06:39am
  • shirtless

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    Yay, I found another Captain fic. It's great that this one is so well-written too. There are few grammar mistakes, the plot seems easy to follow (although some things seem a tad bit unrealistic), and it seems like you update frequently. That's really good, haha. :)

    Although Alexis kind of seems like a Mary Sue character. Constantly referring to a character as stunning, beautiful, perfect, etc, is a little... I don't know. Those descriptions are positive when describing someone, but in most stories it just casts a negative light on the character from the reader. That's just my take on her.

    Regardless, I'm subscribing. I love where you're going with this. :)
    June 25th, 2012 at 08:17pm
  • Captainamerica

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    Thanks so much to everyone who has commented so far!
    I'm working on a chapter right now, should be out this weekend :)
    June 23rd, 2012 at 06:34am
  • Bugalouie

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    This has awesome potential (: Update soon!
    June 23rd, 2012 at 05:58am
  • xxkilljoypresentsxx

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    awesome!!♥
    Love it, Update soon!
    June 22nd, 2012 at 04:34am
  • Gred-and-Forge

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    Great start! I can tell it's going to become even better, keep up the great work :)
    June 22nd, 2012 at 01:39am