If You Incest... - Comments

He did adopt Sarah just to be with her becuz they were stuck like glue, anyhoo well she is possibly pregnant but who's the daddy Zacky or Johnny, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

U posted faithfully twice, anyhoo holy shit did Zacky adopt Sarah when her parents died, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

update soon :)

I seriously love writing this storie. Its my hobby and my favorite thing to do. And I love all my readers,they're such an inspiration.

Wow, love it can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

WOHOOO!! nuff said

Omg! I was freaking lot like why did she sayed with johnny if he hits her and shit, but this chapter was way too awesome

Umm what the hell Johnny raped Sarah and they ended up engaged three months later how in the hell does tht work out and on top of tht he hits her like she is a fucking punching bag, Zacky u need to play the big brother role and kick Johnny's ass can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

What in the hell!?!?!?! Can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

Then again.... now oficially SHIT BLOWING UP in 3...2....1 xD hahahah wtf did just happen!?!
Next one! now!
Soon!
please? :D

Shiiiiiiiitttttttttttt! And blowing shit ahead of us in 3....2...1..
Update this soon!

Oh shitttttttttt!!!!!!!! Can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)
Ps is it kind of sad tht I had a feeling tht Johnny was listening to their conversation becuz I'm sure when Sarah tackled Zacky he had pushed the call button when he landed on the floor so yea

Love this story, it's really good...can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

Well it looks good so far, I like the idea, continue it soon...

-from comment swap.
Loved this from the title, it’s such a cool flip on the song title that is so overdone on mibba. I never read MCR slash/incest stories so I don’t really have much to say on that, but I’d definitely consider removing the warning – it just ruins the mood of the story. There are ratings and tags for a reason! I’d also think about adapting the layout – the colours are way bright and make it difficult to concentrate on the writing. In your first line, ‘My little brother, Mikey Way and I had been on the run for about six months,’ I’d change it a little to become;
‘My little brother, Mikey, and I had been on the run for about six months.’
You didn’t finish the extra bit of sentence. The sentence should still work if you take the commas out, but you didn’t end it. It’s also very odd to introduce your brother with his surname as well as his forename, even if the brothers have different surnames.

Thanks a lot broskii! I enjoy writing it a lot!

ur a really good writer!! the story seems it will be tons of fun :D great job bro