Abandoned - Comments

I enjoyed reading this, though it was a little fast-paced. Her friends seem like total assholes, Sam included, though at the end it looks like he does genuinely like her, so maybe there's hope for them yet!

I liked this, though I have absolutely no idea who this is about. It was kind of like a "straight and to the point" style of writing. It had just enough descriptions and imagery in it though. It was easy to read because of that. The only thing editing wise is that at the end of dialogue you need a comma instead of a period, unless its the end of a statement or the quote is ended with an exclamation point, question mark, ellipses, punctuation like that ;)

This, I thought, was kind of fast paced. It wasn't way too fast or anything, and it wasn't horrible, either. I rather enjoyed reading this story. I liked the plot, it was interesting, and I'm kind of glad Comment Swap brought me here. Great job writing this!