First of all, I must say that's a very descriptive title you've got there! Secondly, I admire what you were going for with this story, though I must say I felt the writing was a bit choppy. There could've been a lot more buildup for the story. All in all, not bad!
i think i've been waited for something like that ever since i've heard about fifty shades of gray. i was like: obviously, somebody is going to write something like 'fifty shades of gay' or something so yeah, i'm defitely starting reding this !
First of all, I must say that's a very descriptive title you've got there! Secondly, I admire what you were going for with this story, though I must say I felt the writing was a bit choppy. There could've been a lot more buildup for the story. All in all, not bad!