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  • MayaAngelou0524

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    This is an amazing idea! Can't wait to read more:-)!
    June 26th, 2012 at 08:12pm
  • stellatakemehomex3

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    I think this is a good start. There are some grammar issues that need to be fixed up, but otherwise its not bad. I think you could add alittle more description. I think once you develop the plot a bit more it will turn out to be a great story. Overall it is well done and i can't wait to read more. Best of luck!
    June 24th, 2012 at 06:51pm
  • AshyMandy

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    I like the idea of the story, and you writing but I think you need to aproch the story differently.
    June 24th, 2012 at 12:37pm
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