A Love Miles Away - Comments

it was really good. update when you have a new chapter :D

I like the background it really sets the mood for me c:

I thoroughly enjoyed the introduction and how it put a certain perspective on things.

The first chapter is thorough detailed and I rather enjoyed it, it also got me interested in Memphis May Fire which is always a plus for me when a story gives me new obsessions.
The character selection is great and the set-up deserves honors :)

I like the background it really sets the mood for me c:

I thoroughly enjoyed the introduction and how it put a certain perspective on things.

The first chapter is thorough detailed and I rather enjoyed it, it also got me interested in Memphis May Fire which is always a plus for me when a story gives me new obsessions.
The character selection is great and the set-up deserves honors :)

Background
The background looks great but I don't see how the flower part ties into the story yet.

Chapter One
I liked how you started it out.. it wasn't a typically I woke up kind of thing. Your grammar needs a bit of work. Commas aren't suppose to be used that much in one sentence. I liked the way they did the singing thing(: Though, that seemed more like filler.

Chapter Two
So the same comma mistakes are in these chapter. You seem to be jumping around the place a bit but I rather enjoyed the chapter.

Winners will be up soon.

I really do like this! I don't really listen to Memphis May Fire, but I know that they are pretty good. (: I think you have a good story planned out. The layout is magnificent, as well. Haha. The character selection is great, too. c:

Comment swap!
I don't know who Matty Mullins is and I've never listened to Memphis May Fire but this was pretty good. The first chapter is a little slow and there isn't really anything that's grabbing your attention. I think Matty should have made an appearance then. But it's your story so do what you want. :)

I like the layout a lot and the summary. I'm kinda bummed there's only one chapter, but it does have me intrigued. It seems like you have a good plot up your sleeves and I do love Memphis May Fire. You may want to space out your paragraphs a bit more to make it easier to read, but other than that it is great. Very little spelling and grammar mistakes.