Holding On To You - Comments

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OMG, so good! I love the characters, except for Brian, the stupid guy! I hope Matt kills Brian! Well, maybe not kill but maybe severely injure. It made me start crying when Caylee told Matt what was wrong with Brian. You're great at writing, please more!

That was brilliant. So emotional and heart wrenching! I would love a sequel to this. It feels line there's more to reveal. Please think about it xx

Dammit, you made me cry again! asjksjdkjs
I can't handle an upset Matt, my heart cannot handle it!! D:

The letter... dude, the letter! I felt so bad for Matt, having to go through all that pain and suffering. Not being able to let go of her, still writing to her even though she never replied, so heartbreaking. Even though I didn't know the reason she left at the part in the story, I still wanted to hurt her for hurting Matt, for just leaving without any explanation or anything. You write emotional very well.

I admit, I was expecting it to be some petty, shitty excuse for her leaving him. I was hoping he would put up a fight and not let her back into his life straight away. But I wasn't expected the reason to be that. Brian, godammit! You horrible man! I can understand why she did leave him now, she didn't want to jeopardize his future with the band, she was scared of what Brian would do to her if she told Matt about it. Poor girl D:

Brian, you're an ass! I hope Matt beats you so hard for this!! She was pregnant you bastard! See, you write so well that you make me feel all these different kinds of emotions haha. I would like to jump into this here story and kick Brian in the face and then huggle Matty.

I think it would be really cool if maybe you added onto this. Maybe just another chapter telling us what Matt did to Brian and how he and Caylee are now. (Really like that name too.) But it's up to you :)

I loved it, thanks for reminding me to read it! <3

So while reading this I picked out a few different mistakes where you used the wrong word or even just left out/added a letter which changed the word enough to confuse. Although, what I did like was the fact that even someone who isn't an Avenged Sevenfold fan could read it and still understand what was happening. You didn't focus on the fact the he was in a band or what band he was in, so this could have read as an original fiction instead of a fan fiction...

This was pretty good. I don’t really know who it’s about, but when it comes down to it, it was very well written and stuff. There weren’t many mistakes I picked up on, though because I’m pretty tired so there just may be some. Well, yeah, as I said I don’t know what’s going on, but you’re an alright writer.

Oh wow. This is really good and I loved the detail. You can tell that you were feeling very emotional writing it because I started to cry when she was telling Matt about Brian. It shocked me to read how you made brian like so mean like that and I was like wow i can't picture him like that but you made me picture it. This is real good.

This was really good. Very well written, and amazing detail. I enjoyed it very much. It held a lot of emotion, and I felt myself tearing up at times from the intensity. That takes real skill, kid. Also, I nearly forgot to mention how well developed your characters are! Even Matt, who I'm assuming you don't own, was really very thought out. He had real emotions and thoughts, instead of being a robot like so many character turn into. I'd also like to admit that I was a little intimidated by the length, but you held my attention through-and-through. :)

THis was really good. Very well written, and amazing detail. I enjoyed it very much. It held a lot of emotion, and I felt myself tearing up at times from the intensity. That takes real skill, kid.

Comment swap is acting stupid. I had to recomment. Anyways, I like how he wrote her letters. I liked how he felt pain because he was away from her. I like how they met again! It's very sweet. Keep writting and dont forget to do the comment swap

Comment swap. I liked this story. I liked how he would send her letters and how they met up again. It's really sweet. It's a good story. Keep writing!

Let me just say that comment swap did me a good thing by recommending this story to me. Not only is it an Avenged Sevenfold, Matt Shadows based fanfiction, It's also wonderfully written! BRIAN YOU SUM A BITCH, I OUGHTA KICK YO SEXY ASS! You go Matt, you don't let her go ever again, okay! The next time she try's to leave tie her down or something because that's love! As for Brian, I hope Matt tracks you down and gets you, not kill you though because bros over hoes and all that good stuff plus I still need my Avenged Sevenfold in my life, you know?

This was an amazing one shot like seriously fantastic, beautiful I can't believe Brian would do something like tht but I'm sure tht Matt is goin to fix tht little problem, Brian, in no time and straighten it out :)

AKXHDKK Yeah but why did Brian do that?!??! Caylee and Matt had something special! D: ugh!! I hope Matt straighten out Brian! She was pregnant though! ;_; this was amazing! I just love your writing! :3

Hello there, comment swap sent me here. Not a fan of Avenged Sevenfold. But I did quite like this. This was well written. Your writing style has a natural flow. It has the right detail to entice the reader. Though it was longer than I would have liked, good job doll :)

Nice introduction - though I'm not familiar with this fandom, but there seems to be quite a weighty history between these two. It should prove an interesting story how (or if) their relationship builds back.

First of all, I really like the layout- it hurt my eyes a little bit but that doesn't really matter cause it looked really good. And the banner was incredible, I loved it.

This story was really touching, the greif they were feeling was so poignant and it really created a atmosphere to the story. I loved how you showed there emotions and made the reader feel what the characters were feeling. I felt like I really knew them, even though I'm not familiar with the band you made it your own so it didn't matter I felt just as invested in them as I would have if I was familiar with them. Also adding to the atmosphere of the story I thought it was a great technique to use, not adding any dialogue up until the point when they see eachother again. I don't know if that was intentional or not but it worked.

I also loved how you started out in his point of view so we were sympathetic to him and then showed that she was going through just as much loss as he was. It showed how there are more than one sides to every situation, which I feel like when youu're just in one persons head in a story you tend to side with them automatically and think the other persons a dick but not really like about there incentives for things.

"She wasn’t even able to describe her feelings anymore, it was like a tornado inside her turning everything into a complete mess." This was definately one of my favorite lines.

I liked how when she shows up at his doorstep he doesn't just automatically accept her back with open arms, in fact he got pretty pissed. I loved this because it's how most people would react, though a lot of writers overlook what is realistic and just try to make it as lovey-dovey as possible.

The ending was so good, and I felt so bad for her when it was revealed why she left him. I'm not gonna I lie I had thought she didn't have any incentive for leaving him and I kind of wanted to slap her around a little bit, but now I'm completely empathetic to her character.

Theres only a little bit of constructive critism that I have about this story. Sometimes some of your wording was a bit off, and it just took away from the flow of the story a little. Maybe just reading it out loud and seeing what doesn't really sound right out loud can help a great deal with the flow.

"You made your choice by leaving, without saying a word – and it was just time for me to make up my mind and make my own." The end of that sentence was kind of weird and I wasn't sure exactly what you meant by it. Maybe it would work better as "-and it was just time for me to make up my mind and make my own decision." or just ending the sentence after "make up my own mind," might work.

Then there were little things that didn't really take away from it like at one point you said "Discuss" when I believe you meant "disgust." but again, just reading through it a few times will help you pick up on these little things.

Overall, I really like this story and it left me wanting more. I think it could work as a chaptered story because I really want to know what happens with Brian and Matt and more about how Matt and her relationship turns out.

jkgnbwajrbgljrbh Jesus Christ Brian! *Slap attacks him*
I wasn't expecting that, I was expecting some pitiful excuse in which I would have called Matt a moron for taking her back but she had good reason, not wanting ruin anything and not wanting to get hurt by Brian for being near Matt and letting him know what went down.

Really touching, emotionally charged with a good outcome ending, for most of them haha.
Loved it :D
And yay! Third person :D

Oh my god, dude, this was so touching and awesome. Amazing job. c:

xoxo, Saleigh