Never Take Your Pulse for Granted Again - Comments

this is really Good hope you update soon! I'd love to see what happens :)

I love this story =) plz update soon kay

**Here because of comment swap**

Okay, I'm going to start out with this... I'm not positive on who MIW is. I think that you should add a little note on who/what they are. Just so that comment swappers like me will know and better understand the story better.

On other news, this story is very capturing and I feel bad for Rylie... I really hope she can be comfortable around men again. Also, you have very good writing. :) Keep it up!

update omfg this is so good I can't

I don't know why, but I'm extremely addicted to this story... seriously. It's just so amazing.
Continueee! c:

You need to (please) write more soon! I really love this story. Not only because its MIW but because of the way you're writing it and detail you're putting. Love it!

Sorry, it posted twice -_-

Sorry, it posted twice -_-

Sorry, it posted twice -_-

Your story is great, really nice writing. I hope you update soon! Good to know that they're moving away from their dad.... I think this story has a lot of potential, and I can't wait to see what else this story is going to have. Update soon <3 (Hope MIW is in the next chapter :D)

Your story is great, really nice writing. I hope you update soon! Good to know that they're moving away from their dad.... I think this story has a lot of potential, and I can't wait to see what else this story is going to have. Update soon <3 (Hope MIW is in the next chapter :D)

Hi there! Okay I have to be honest with you. Reading this made me extremely uncomfortable. I'm not down with rape in any form and it's really difficult for me to read about. I've given up reading really great books because I just couldn't take the nature of scenes such as that :/ But comment swap brought me here so I am going to try and look past that and just focus on your writing alone.

Your actual writing (word choice, flow, pacing) I like. Your writing has just the right amount of detail to make the story come to life. I would suggest to work a little on the dialogue and try to make it sound a little more realistic. I have never been in that situation and I stay clear of material involving it, but I feel like the dialogue seemed a bit contrived.

I don't know if you've realized this or not, but your layout makes your story almost impossible to read through. I figured I'd tell you this because I hate to see the work that someone put in their layout go to waste (and I also don't really like the default layout)! Also, it is against the rules to put link within your stories. Those are reserved for the author's note section. I say this as you can get reported for having them there.

So I think that's about it! I'm sorry if this wasn't the comment you were looking for, but these are definitely just my opinions and feel free to take or leave them as you desire. Overall, I think this story has a lot of potential and I hope that you continue to write!

Cheers!