The Story Behind The Greatest Show Unearthed - Comments

@eminems_stan93

Thanks for being honest, I'm really greatful fot that. I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapyer, too. I understand, damn Comment Swap keeps giving me things I don't like either. Ya, I don't see many stories on albums. I'll jeep writing and try to improve like you mentioned. Thanks!

I really enjoyed reading the first chapter, however I don't find myself interested in reading anymore chapters. Comment swap brought me here by the way and I tend to be super honest so don't be offended. I think your writing skills could use more work, the story is simple to read, nothing to dramatic in discriptions. I don't think you need to change your writing style for anyone else but if you want to improve you should. I'm gernerally not interested in horror stories, but I think it's an amazingly creative way to write a story based on an album. Keep writing.

As the person below me said, it is indeed a very cool idea to write a story based off of an album as opposed to the actual band itself (: Generally speaking, your writing was decent, not the best, but I was still able to read your story without much frustration. I would try using more colorful words and better transitions. Some of the phrasing was well overused and have read countless times in other horror stories. Otherwise, keep up the good work, you're doing a fantastic job (:

This is really cool. I never would have thought about writing a story based on this album. I like it :]