You Can't See Me - Comments

Comment swap brought me to this one. Typically I wouldn't go for this type of story, as I don't really follow this entire thing. But, I must say, this story did draw me in. I really was impressed by it. The plot structure seems to be flowing really nicely so far, and I wish you the best of luck as you continue!

Hiya I got sent this by comment swap.
Your a very good writer and I actually did not think I would like this as I am not a fan of your characters but I was determined to read it so i could get your a honest comment and was very surprised to find that I was completely pulled into it.

You make it very easy to read by leaving a good space between paragraphs and you don't make each paragraph to long either so that's great.

I am about to start reading chapter 2 and I am loving that Cena is about to start working at the school that Holly is a principle at even if he is just undercover for his gang leader ha ha.

I hope he does not get in trouble again and end up going back to prison.
Looking forward to finding out what is going to happen.

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Well, I must say, I've been avoiding this story for a while, simply due to the fact that I normally don't like stories like this. But then, I read it. And I was actually impressed. You did an absolutely wonderful job!

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I'm not into John Cena or anything like that but this was surprisingly good! I really admire your ambition to take on a CD fan fiction. That is not an easy thing to do. I think you look into designing a layout for this story. Never underestimate the power of a good layout. ;)

Hello! So I got this story off of Comment Swap and I must say that I really enjoyed this. I think that you have a good plot and you are overall and amazing writer. Your words flow with ease and you have good imagery in the story. I did notice a couple of spelling/grammar mistakes in the story and if you would like, I would gladly point them out to you. Just shoot me a message or something. Anyway, I hope that you continue this story and I can’t wait for an update, I just subscribed. (:

Your writing skills are great, though the ending of the chapter could have ended at a better place but aside from that the only thing I could possibly think of is that there could be just a tad bit more detail. You've got a decent story going here, so keep at it! :)

I was sent here by comment swap, and I will admit that this is not what I usually read, and I don't really know a lot about John Cena.
Though, you totally trapped me in your web with the behaviour John is having. It feels like his arrogance hides something weak, no? ok. :c
I enjoyed reading this, being more into bandslashes and boy x boy heheh don't hit me.
Uhm yeah that's about it, I like your writing (I already said it didn't I?) and I've been surprised as to what talent could make me read.
Do keep up the thing, you've got skills c:

Your writing is amazing. Your words flow with ease and it was an easy read. The way you described Ronnie intrigued me, and I don't know why. I've never heard of this band or C.D. I think it was creative and original, job well done. I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors which made the fic a lot easier to read. I could visualize the way you described things easily and that is hard for me to do. Keep up the amazing writing, you're truly good at it. :)