First comment cool, I thought that this was a great idea for a story. I was actually hooked after the first chapter, but not so much after the summary. I think that if you made your summary more of a hook it would make a great difference. Francis is such an awesome name, but he is so awful. I do think that you made his character very real. I also think that you do a great job of making Kattarina come to life. There was one mistake that I notice in many stories. TV needs to be in all caps because it is an abbreviation. Keep up the great work.