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  • masked beauty

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    This is a very unique story, I haven't read anything like this before. You have an amazing ability to capture me into the book wanting more each chapter I read. I am very intrigued and will subscribe, you did a wonderful job so far!
    March 27th, 2014 at 04:41pm
  • Alsoldey

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    This was absolutely amazing!! Your details had my mind painting a bunch of pictures! This needs more recommendations. Well done!
    September 18th, 2012 at 10:59am
  • Ayesha C

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    hey. i just saw your comment on my profile about commenting on here. Sorry!! i didnt realise i had commented 3 times- thought it was just twice. Yes you were right, its throught the comment swap service and it wouldnt register my comment. So im just gona try one last time, if it still doesnt work i wont keep doing it =).
    Intelligent concept- though its based on the little mermaid loosely like you mention- i'm hoping you have your own unique twist. Beautiful descriptive writing technique also, good start =).
    August 16th, 2012 at 03:17am
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    Intelligent concept- though its based on the little mermaid loosely like you mention- i'm hoping you have your own unique twist. Beautiful descriptive writing technique also, good start =).
    August 8th, 2012 at 07:35am
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    Amazing writing. I loved your take on it. She was flawed and I loved that! Great job ;)
    July 20th, 2012 at 03:40pm
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    Intelligent concept- though its based on the little mermaid loosely like you mention- i'm hoping you have your own unique twist. Beautiful descriptive writing technique also, good start =).
    July 8th, 2012 at 03:46am
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    Intelligent concept- though its based on the little mermaid loosely like you mention- i'm hoping you have your own unique twist. Beautiful descriptive writing technique also, good start =).
    July 3rd, 2012 at 04:49pm
  • Katie Mosing

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    I love your opening line. It was very intriguing and a real attention grabber.

    I think you have a good story, but part of me thought that you over did all the adjectives and metaphors. It seemed like every line had a fanciful flourish of words and I thought that it got to be a little bit distracting, but that's just my opinion!
    July 1st, 2012 at 11:51pm
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    I'm interested. :]
    Can't wait or more! Keep up the good work!
    July 1st, 2012 at 04:56pm
  • Teddi Manni

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    This was very intense. I wonder what is going on with this mysterious girl stealing this silver-liquid stuff and what kind of creature--if she is one--she really is.

    I am inrigued by this and will subscribe. The way you have written this is detailed and beautiful. You are quite talened<3 update soon, love :)
    July 1st, 2012 at 02:48pm
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