July 19th, 2012 at 10:14am
I love the whole idea of just doing dialogue. You pulled it off quite well. The dialogue was believable and very cute. I think the way you wrote it really shows the bond between Clare and Alyssa and how no matter how they're feeling about eachother they're still sisters.
It sort of reminded me of my own sister.
Anyways, I really liked it. Bravo!
Awe, this was really really sweet, actually. It's realistic how something so unfortunate can bring the sisters back together, and it makes you appreciate your siblings a bit more. For strictly dialogue this was very very nice. Although... I think since you didn't make the contest deadline you could go back and add the non-dialogue parts and it would be so, so much more emotional. I'm not saying it wasn't beautiful as is, because it was! I'm just suggesting something, that's all! This was lovely though.