I love Flyzik! And he is so cute in this story, I love the way you made the characters have a range of emotions and different sides to their personality. Also, the part about Alex being sensitive and deep was REALLY awesome, because it's so true. That conversation was my favorite part so far :) Hope you update soon!
I love this. Matt Flyzik is my favorite man ever. I've met him like 7 times. He's not an asshole, well not to me, he was always the biggest sweetheart. But then.. I did give him a Mickey Mouse bracelet when I first met him. Lol. This story is amazing.
Asdfghjjklteoxbeiiehr this story is so perfect and the Matt feels I'm getting are just tnsjdjdjej and I have butterflies from reading. Thank you and please update!(:
Hey, comment swap here- normally I dont read 'real life characters' stories but I really enjoyed the first couple of chapters and found your writing easy to follow, there are a couple of spelling mistakes but nothing major.
As another comment said I think jazzing the layout a little will make it more attractive :) good luck with your writing
Ah I sometimes love Comment swap, this is pretty awesome so far. Congratulations, you caught my attention. I like how you build the characters up, and I like the plot so far. One thing, the layout is a little 'meh' looking, probably not your fault. But maybe changing it will make the overall look of the fic more adult and grown up. :3 xx
Comment swap sent me here. I was a little confused in the beginning with the psst's I thought she was crazy and the bag was talking to her but as I read chapter 2 I figured out it was him telling her psst. As for the development of characters it's really nice to see that you don't give up too much but you don't make them so vauge that you can't understand the whole story. very nice work. -S
Comment swap sent me here;; I literally love this. You use great detail, so kudos to you! I love the storyline. I just love everything about this, okay? You're definitely getting a recommendation and I'm subscribing. Keep it up, buttercup.