A Kiss Before the Dawn - Comments

This is very different. I don't really care for your writing style and that makes it hard for me to read. Also, your layout is straining. The grey on grey is hard to read. I feel like Emily and Aeneas's relationship is too fake, so it's hard to get into it.

I encourage you to keep writing even though I won't continue reading.

This isn't usually the kind of story I'm into, but you write it well and I really like it!

^^ I'm happy you liked it! And you're very welcome!
As for the layout, I just found it and the way it looked just seemed to be in right mood for this story. :D

Thank you for the dedication. I saw that you updated this, and I was like, "Yay!"

Okay, I was so happy that they danced together. A soft smile formed across my lips as I read that. But as for what happened when Aeneas pulled away from Emily to go and kiss Olivia, I wanted to smack him again. Yes, he's engaged to her, but still. I thought that was really uncalled for. Again, Aeneas can be such a dunderhead.

Yet I thought it was nice that Aeneas went to Emily in her time of need, even though he freaked her out a bit. Afterwards though, when they shared that passionate kiss, it made my heart completely melt. I just really loved this update.

I also want to tell you that I like the layout, and I like how you've crafted the mixed emotions that Aeneas is having for Emily. You've done a really good job with it.

~Lady

Okay, so I really hope Aeneas at least dances with Emily at her celebration. The dunderhead could at least do that. Although he probably won't, because of the fight that will take place which is hinted in the summary. But still, the romantic in me wants them to have at least one dance together.

God, I'm hoping they do.

Anyway, Aeneas shouldn't have even barged in on Emily like that. What the hell was he thinking!? I understand that he wanted to talk with Emily, but breaking down her door and door frame, just no. When I read that, I was reminded a little of one of my characters who has an infatuation with his sister in one of my stories. Just because that's something that my character would do.

But, I'm getting off track. I really like the description you gave of Emily's evening gown. It sounded really pretty.

I'm really looking forward to when the celebration starts.

~Lady

I got a Hocus Pocus kind of feel to it at the beginning, with Thachary and Emily from the movie! Then it totally changed. I really like it!

After reading that, I really want to smack Aeneas so badly when he sent Emily away. But, he is a male, and a confused male with his emotions for his sister. But still, I was like "NO! Don't do that you dunderhead!" ::twitich: I wanted him so badly to go after her and tell her that he was just being a dunderhead, but obviously he didn't.

Haha, the waiting thing is like what I do all the time to my readers, some of them absolutely hate it, so I guess it's only right that I have to wait in return with stories that I read. And there's nothing wrong with being caught up in a story. I'm kind of like that at the moment with Passionate Obsession. And it's no trouble leaving feedback. I love to receive it, so it's only right that I return it.

Also, I'm happy you're enjoying Passionate Obsession. I know I've said that before, but I really am. I have a thing about erotic stories that I love to write. There's just something about them.

I'm really looking forward to when Emily's eighteenth birthday celebration will be happening. I want to know what happens so badly. That, and I just want Aeneas to come out and tell Emily what he does to her. Dunderhead.

~Lady

LOL ;-) The waiting just makes it all worth while! :D I'm really happy you're liking this so far! I've actually got so caught up with my ideas for this story that I've taken a pause on The Soprano. I think I'll finish this story first and then keep going with The Soprano.
^^ I really appreciate your feedback, it means a lot coming from a great writer such as yourself. And your story Passionate Obsession has me on the edge!! It's awesome! You're extremely talented at this!

First off, I would like to apologize for not commenting sooner.

Okay, now that that's out of the way, I found what you've updated so far to be both heartbreaking and emotional. I was wondering what was going to happen to the two siblings, as I was reading through the first chapter, and after it was revealed, I wasn't all that surprised. For them to be separated after their father's death wasn't all that shocking. It was saddening, but not shocking.

I find that the separation was needed, and that it molds the two of them as characters. Throughout their whole time apart, their affection and love for one another grew. I love it how Aeneas is having the mental breakdown with himself after Emily comes back, because throughout all the time of separation, he still cares for her and has grown to love her at a dangerous level. Through trying to find solace in the arms of many whores, I find that those nights of sinful passion have just made his emotions for Emily grow. He seems like a rather tragic character, a character that throughout all of his relaxed, cool exterior is still struggling on the inside. I think his moment where he was hugging Emily in her previous bedchamber proved that.

I'm really looking forward to how the rest of this will pan out. I'm actually waiting in silent anticipation for the two of them to just give into their desires for the other, but I have a feeling I'm going to have to wait a while.

~Lady

I'm actually rather intrigued by this. It seems like Aeneas will be turning into one of the undead before the story is out. I also find it intriguing that they're step siblings. I just think that's more intimate between the two main characters.

Also, I have a thing for incest stories, even though I don't read them much.

I'm really interested to see what it'll be like when Emily turns eighteen, and what will happen to Aeneas. I'm also really interested to see/read what happens on the night of her festivities.

~Lady