July 10th, 2013 at 09:03am
I'm going to begin with the layout, and I have to say that I found extreme difficulty in reading this. The grey text against the grey background was harsh on the eyes, so I'd recommend changing the background colour to something lighter, perhaps black font against a white background?
Moving on to the actual content, I thought this was beautifully written. It was sad but it really got to me, which I thought was brilliantly done. The ending was bittersweet, but I think you ended it in a really nice and touching way. I loved that was a war based story, because you don't read many of those around, at least stories that I've seen or read. Another thing I loved that was you gave no names or appearances, so it could be left up to the reader to interpret what he or she wanted. Overall, a great piece!
Yeah that layout is just not good! I've been meaning to change it, but I get lazy and forget
Thank you for such the lovely comment though! I appreciate it!