November 18th, 2018 at 03:26am
I liked your characters a lot, but I got really caught up on minor capitalization/spelling/punctuation errors. I like green though, so the layout is nice. I'd say work on your plot more than anything, as there didn't seem to be much point to where we were going or why. Don't be afraid to throw your character's a curve ball!
Mainly some editing will fix any glaring issues. Proofreading and editing saves lives.
Keep writing!
Keep writing, I believe you can be a great author someday!
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