The idea is very different but in a good way. I like the first chapter there are just some errors but I bet if you look through and read again you will catch them. That always happens to me. Oops. Uh, it gets confusing with who talks since its in the same sentences but the conversations are good. This is interesting and I am very curious as to where it will go. I also like the Gabilliam because that is my all time favorite couple. I love how the chapter ends.
Poor Ryan :(