A Broken Bone - Comments

I love this. Ryan is so lovely when he's sweet and sad Brendon tears at my heartstrings. “I’ve never broken a bone before,” he told me, and then he laughed. “Nothing’s ever been wrong with me before.” “Nothing’s wrong with you now.” is such a sweet little bit. Ryan seems like a caring mother and ugh, I want more! This is lovely. My one complaint is that you switch tenses a few times, which is a little distracting, but overall it's pretty much perfect. Keep it up!

Very interesting. Your writing works well with the story. I would like to point out if you made the font color on the story it would be much easier to read. This isn't normally the type of story I read and was a pleasent change. Keep up the good work!

This was really well written. Very detailed. It really showed us the relationship without you saying, "He's my best friend." :) That takes real skill, yah know. I truly hope you continue, because it sounded like you had a wonderful idea if you were to continue.

So glad I decided to read this. I just love the whole narration and tone of it. I feel bad for Brendon at the end, though, just cause Ryan says he just wants to be friends, but Brendon needs and wants so much more. Anyways, sorry this comment is kinda crappy. Absolutely beautiful job on this; I enjoyed reading!

I like the story but the only complaint I have is the background and the text. It's hard to read. I had to highlight the text in order to see it good. Change that and it's fine. I love the characters although I'm not too familiar with the fandom that you used.
By the way, I'm here for the comment swap.

Oh gosh, Judey. Everything you do amazes me- but this really blew the air out of my lungs.

I've been trying to avoid Ryan things because my heart can possibly break anymore but you wrote something so obviously I had to read it. I'm so glad I did. I mean, it broke my heart even more, but it was worth it. You have an incredible way with words. I want more, but I don't know if my soul could handle more.

I love how you don't outright say the line 'Melt your headaches and call it home"; instead you make small references to it. "She would melt them away" and referencing the headache to a broken bone.

Oh gosh, Judey, I love you and this.