Beside the Fire - Comments

Hey! Brought here by comment swap.

I honestly didn't think I was going to like this, like at all. Sad to say but I will judge a story by it's layout and you're banner could probably be a little better. I know that sounds horrible, I'm sorry!

Anyways I absolutely loved, loved, loved this. It was utterly amazing. Once I started reading I couldn't stop and I actually wanted to cry towards the end.

You're an amazing writer and the only big thing, and it's not even that big because I barely came across it, but just make sure you re-read everything and check for grammar and spelling errors. But other then that amazing story.

Keep on writing!

Contest:
Wow, this was crazy-good. I love the way you incorporated the lyrics into the story and it was very very touching. Aaliyah and Liam are the perfect couple and it was so sad at the end when they both passed away. Great story :D

First of all, I would like to say this is very very touching. My only suggestion is to each of the time periods up into its own chapter that way it's not as long and as intimidating for the reader.

This was beautiful. Beautifully written, beautiful idea and a beautiful love presented. A real love as well which is not always something found in stories these day. I thoroughly enjoyed this so thank you for sharing.

Sadie J. Blue xxx