I am not much of a bug fan but I really like your story line. It would be better if you had a better layout and not such a bright color. Sfter a while your eyes begin to hurt. You should also try putting in more detail so readers can fully understand what you are potraying in your story. Other than that I like it. Keep it up you only have one CHAPter down!
July 10th, 2012 at 02:55am