November 1st, 2012 at 02:14pm
Wow.... That was a mind trip, seriously. They're in love but he won't admit. He'll die for her but then pushes her off a building, only to follow her himself. I don't think either of them had full intentions of jumping but I suppose when life gives you lemons, you jump off a building. This was a lovely read and in such a short amount of time, you had me on the edge of my seat with my jaw hanging haha.
Excellent job!
I KNOW IT'S LATE AND I SHOULD BE DOING NANO/CHEMISTRY HOMEWORK RIGHT NOW BUT I DON'T CARE ;P
Wow... So basically this is amazing! It's extremely powerful, and just so well written. Please can I have your writing skills? *puppy eyes*. There were so many twists in it! I couldn't believe it when he pushed her off the building just after saying 'I love you', and then he jumped off himself and just, this really pulls at the heart strings! I really want to know why they ended up there in the first place. One of my favourite lines in this whole thing is If the two policemen could have read minds, they would have found out that they were years too late, and that nothing they said was going to make a difference. Okay so most of it's my favourite part. Really I'm not sure how to convey how much I love this. I'm extremely happy you chose a snickers because if not I'd probably have never found this. The interactions between the characters is extremely realistic and ugh... Why isn't this longer?
Definitely one of the best one shots I've ever read on here, if I could recommend it more than once I would.