September 5th, 2012 at 02:40am
Waves - Comments
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I thought she told Mel in the last chapter?September 4th, 2012 at 04:05am
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Finally she did it!! Update soonAugust 6th, 2012 at 03:04am
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I fucking love it! They're soo adorable together!!!July 24th, 2012 at 09:42pm
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Awh they're sooo cute together! I really hope Jason gets caught. Maybe her and her dad can put him behind bars too. Update soon(:July 23rd, 2012 at 03:08am
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I love the character development :) Can't wait for moreJuly 22nd, 2012 at 06:58pm
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I am seriously IN LOVE with this story. But im about to kick Jasons ribs in >< Hahaha. Tistans awesome. just sayin.July 22nd, 2012 at 06:34am
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I love your story!! Personally i think Tristan is a smartass but he'll be good for her. Damn Jason. Hes a sick bastard. Update soon(:July 22nd, 2012 at 05:52am
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I love your story!! Personally i think Tristan is a smartass but he'll be good for her. Damn Jason. Hes a sick bastard. Update soon(:July 22nd, 2012 at 05:52am
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I really like the characters and the plot, plus you're a really good writer :) I can't wait for moreJuly 22nd, 2012 at 05:22am
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Yesssss. Loving it, keep it coming please! Update asap :DJuly 22nd, 2012 at 04:38am
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Loving this story! Please update soon :) its one of my favourites now!July 21st, 2012 at 03:00am
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awesome, write more soon^.^
or update soon..
or yeah!
I wonder what Tristan is hiding about Jason xpJuly 20th, 2012 at 10:21am -
Oh my gosh, I'm in love with Jason. He seems so sweet! I can't wait to read more! This story is great, there are a few grammar problems, but other than that I am really enjoying it. I would suggest spell checking before posting, it would fix the simple things :DJuly 20th, 2012 at 04:23am
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this is a really good story so far , I can't wait to see where you'll take it.
Also , I subscribed :]July 18th, 2012 at 05:45am -
I'm really enjoying this story, Clary is too cute n.n I have to agree with Sherlock_Holmes though, the Clary/Mel friendship was a bit rushed. There were a quite a few grammatical errors in the earlier chapters, but they didn't effect the story much. Jason is a total cutie, I can't wait for the surfing lesson :D I'd love to learn more about how Clary is coping with her mother's absence and the death of her sister. Some raw, emotional scenes you know? All in all, this is a really great story and I'm excited for the next update!July 17th, 2012 at 10:00pm
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Wow, I really like this story. So far it's pretty good, and it's set in Florida, where I live, so I also like that too. One thing that bothered me was that Mel and Clary's friendship seemed really rushed. It's like they've been best friends for years, instead of only knowing each other for less than a day, so that seemed a bit strange to me. Other than that, this seems really good and I can't wait to find out what happens next!July 13th, 2012 at 07:18pm
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In your summary, where you put "threw," it should have been "through." I had to point that out because it's one of the first things a person notices.
Also, Ford should be capitalized because it's a brand. Also, your paragraphs kind of run on and I think they need to be broken up into a few separate paragraphs.
So far, that all seems really negative, but I just had to get my corrections and suggestions up and out of the way first. I really do love your story and want to know more about it. It's really well written and your story idea is interesting. It's tough sometimes to write a genuinely sad story without sounding whiny, and you are doing it really well so far. So fix a couple little issues and then please continue.July 12th, 2012 at 01:23am
Sorry, I had and still have a cold. My head is all fuzzy, but thanks for letting me know :D