How To Get Your Guy - Comments

This story is very......um.......interesting. I can find myself reading this on a day when I need a pick me up. This has really captured my attention. One problem though I can't really connect with the characters. I just feel as of its all happening so fast. Try adding a little more description and try slowing the story down just a little bit. Overall good story..!

Please update soon. This is so adorbz!

Please update! So so so cute <3

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So I like the idea of this story and I think you are presenting it well. The introduction to Beau and the rejection happened kind of fast. As for grammar, there's a few lower cased I's, some misuses of punctuation, and some phrases that didn't make much since, but those are all probably just typing errors. Other than that, I think you could probably explain a little more because I didn't really connect with Kelsey or any of the characters. Longer paragraphs with more description would help. Good luck with your story!

SOO cute <3 Luke and Beau just ... YUM haha Please update!

Well, I've switched teams in one short paragraph. They look the freaking same Kelsey! Just date Luke for crying out loud.

Kelsey bests flaunt it before she loses it! Shake what ya momma gave ya.

OH MY GOD!!!! I just died! I knew Luke liked her!!!

Please update soon!!!

I'm seriously in love with this story(:

Please update soon?(:

Asdfghjkl; I CAN'T EVEN.

Luke is such a good friend but I sence he may have a crush on her ?

Ahhhh please please update!!!! I need me some more Beau ;D lol

UPDATE!!

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My first thought was: Ah my god pink!
Haha. Sorry, ok serious now. Uh i like how the layout is simple and easy to read. Your line breaks is sort of interesting, it sort of reminds me of a script more than a story but nothing wrong with that. This story sounds cute and probably very amusing :) good job.

Interesting format, I like stories with layouts that surprise me. Some descriptions would be nice, the dialogue does help to keep things interesting but I'd like to have the scene set a bit more. Overall though, I think it achieves what it sets out to do, so keep updating :)

ah love it! update soon! :)

i love it! :) luke is such a sweetie :) update soon please

i love it! :) luke is such a sweetie :) update soon please

this is good! I also have a story about Beau but I can't wait for you to update! <3

Hm, this seems like it's interesting. I don't know what Janoskian is, but yeah aha.

The chapter seemed really fast-paced, which I'm not sure I liked. I think you could have used more descriptions and we could have gotten into the character's heads a little bit more, you know?

I liked the layout, it was nice and simple, and the summary was nice as well. I think there could have been less "this is what's going to happen" and more "this is part of the plot, here, be surprised"

Either way, I think this story has tons of potential, so good luck with it (:

I've recommended and subscribed, I think it's fast paced, but I like that, however I also like description, and if you're not already writing it I'd like to know what Luke, Skip and Beau look like and also Jai if Beau and he aren't identical, or if they are then some way od telling them apart. I can't wait to read more, PLEASE update soon!

This is good but it is a little fast paced for me. You have a lot of dialogue which is by no means a bad thing but I like descriptive writing as well and more of that will help though you are only on the first chapter and there's so much more to come. You layout is nice as well and really reflects the story, it's girly and cute and doesn't throw the reader off.