One Night Stand - Comments

I like the concept of this story but i agree with the comment below, the chapters are too long and i find myself getting bored with it. Try chopping them into halves. I'm got a little confused on what exactly was going on between the first couple of chapters. Just shorten some things up and you got yourself a great project :)

Alright, so the first thing I noticed was how incredibly long your chapters are. I only read the first chapter, and I found myself losing interest in the middle of it. There was too much information in the chapter and I kind of forgot what happened at the beginning of the chapter.

I also think you could add a bit more description, I felt a bit lost during some of it because it didn't seem to be explained as much as it could have.

You seem to have a good plot here, so good luck with it! :)

This story is really interesting and brandy? Yeah, i hate her.