The Cynical Bookworm - Comments

I stumbled upon this story thanks to the comment swap feature, and I normally wouldn’t read arranged marriage stories, but this one is really well-done! The reason for the marriage is wicked and deplorable, but it really gives insight into Alec and Freya’s parents. I hope everything works out for them, whether they end up happily married or they somehow get out of the marriage and stay friends. Their chemistry is funny and heartwarming, especially in that last chapter, your writing is witty and easy to read, and your grammar is impeccable. Keep up the great work! :)

omg god bless you I love you so much I am hilarious. You remember that Mike fanfiction? Yepp, well it's gonna happen now.

“The warm summer air created a confinement for the pair, which one could neither enter nor leave.” I love this line. It’s very detailed and interesting, because most people don’t view air as something that can trap people. Maybe it’s not really the air doing it, but the mood. I really like their back and forth conversation in chapter one. He’s so overly-confident, but she manages to say things that knock him down a peg, and then he ends up getting one back on her. Love their biting phrases.

“A story never starts in the middle of all the action, unless it’s a Greek tragedy, of course.” Thank you for writing this line. This is proof that your female character, is indeed, a bookworm. Do you know how many stories there are out there that have a so-called “bookworm”, and all the author does to illustrate this point is say “they love reading books.” You have shown that not only does she love to read, but she actually learns from reading. This makes the character all the more believeable.

“I prefer men who don’t use women like Kleenex.” I love this similie.

“The blonde twirled her, badly dyed, hair” In this line in chapter three, the two commas are unnecessary. The sentence reads correctly without them.

“Even though she was pretending to be resolute, on the inside, she was a cracked dam, spewing emotions in a torrent.” Great metaphor. I also find chapter four to be sweet and it makes me secretly want things to works out between them when they end up married. I like the Prelude, too, because it introduces a male character, who I’m assuming may be her other love interest. Haha, time for Alec to become the jealous one now, huh? Does Freya like her boys jealous? Haha. I must say, I’m not too crazy about this Loran chick, though.

AHH. oh the drama! you know, i love me a good arranged marriage, ESPECIALLY if the asshole quotes a walk to remember, i mean come on, its cheesy and everyone loves it. i CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE SOOO GET TO IT TWINKEY! haha i love you <3

Okay, I'm seriously loving the quick updates :) This chapter was amazing!

This story is absolutely lovely :) Update soon?

Hello there. :) The basic idea which is an arranged marriage is very cummon. I have read a bunch of them already but none of them was as well written as this one. I really like Freya's sarcastic character. I'm glad comment swap brought me here. XD The descriptions were pretty good and not boring at all. Freya's character made ma want to read more of this, so you better post the next chapter soon. XD WELL DONE! GOOD JOB. XD

I just fell in love <3

This is so beautifully written and the character development is to die for. I love the relationship between Freya and Alec, it's both hilarious and interesting to read about. And oh my goodness, the second chapter was amazing as well. You had me cracking up with Freya thinking Marjorie not knowing how to turn on a stove. And the background for Alec and Freya meeting was perfect. I love her cynicism and his sleazy ways.

Third chapter; I just really love this. I love how sarcastic Freya is with Misty and the little tidbit Alec leaves for her. I just love this story to bits. <3

Overall this is a wonderful story with great flow, development and no mistakes. I hope you progress with it~! And I'm definitely subscribing (:

This brilliant! From the title to Freya's character... I love this even more. I know a couple of people like Freya, too sarcastic for their own good, that you can't help but like anyway. They're too interesting to dislike, as is Freya. You're writing is flawless - no mistake, grammar or otherwise - and flows well with what this story is about. It's great, keep up the good work! This is really good so far! :

I love this! I think Freya is a wonderful, well rounded character and Alec is just the same. Your writing has no flaws and your writing style fits perfectly with the style of your characters and of your story. I am hooked, and I await an update! Well done!

asdfkl this is so cute, I love it.
It's crazy how it's kind of a serious story, but I keep making this strange unnattractive face somewhere between a squealing fangirl and a rare animal.

When commenting on a story I love as much as I do this one, I tend to jump all over the place, making it impossible to have flowing paragraphs. So, I apologize in advance. I have a feeling this will be long.

First, no. This is far from being a let down and there's no need to tell you it was boring because it wasn't.
Your writing has no flaws, dammit! Alec being a sleazebag is perfect, there, I said it! I wasn't even expecting it so I was pleasantly surprised in an 'ugh, get lost' kind of way. Because nobody likes a sleaze, right? If that makes any sense.
And to make everything a bajillion times better, Freya is her usual amazing, dry humored, derisive self. I had a big evil smile on my face the whole time she was smacking Alec around. She brings out my inner bitch and I seem to have no problem with it.:/ *cough* Ahem.......pshoo.......................

What I'd tell you, long ass comment. I've made it clear though, that you can do no wrong in writing this. In the end, I worship this story, meaning I'm here to stay, sorry!

Love it

I love this. It's witty and oddly adorable. It's got this off-beat rhythm that make it interesting and hard to look away from.
It's amazing -please continue!
I wish I could be as diplomatic as the commenter two paces under me, but I'm not. Update soon, update for yourself, but most importantly update for me because I'm your biggest fan. xD

This was so unusual in a genius kind of way. The dialogue was nothing like I've read before. She's so quick and sardonic and I love the fact that he finds it endearing. Plus, you sneaking in the part about their parents arrangement. You are making me constantly question whats going to happen next. Bravo, this is brilliant!

well, despite the shortness, I'm hooked already; it's a good read, especially for being so small. you're an exceptional author. I won't ask you to continue it for me or anyone else but yourself; but I like the idea, thus far. c:

I like it so far, please update soon?