I've only read one royal family fanfic before, but it was based around Will and Kate, so this was a nice change. I really like where this is headed. Your plot is flowing nicely and your characters are really well developed. This story has great potential, good luck!
I admit that I found this fanfic on Comment Swap, but I have always been looking for a good fanfiction based around Harry and you are a god sent. I think you have portrayed your character exellantly and I am already addicted to it so I'm uber excited to read the next installment! I.have subscribed so be sure to see another one of my creepily amazed comments.
Heyy! first comment! yayy! I really liked the first chapter and can't wait to see where you go with this. One thing though, I noticed this story was rated PG-13, but yet you have a racy picture of two people having sex haha. It just sorta, contradicted to me LOL other than that, you have an awesome start and I'm looking forward to your next update :)
I've only read one royal family fanfic before, but it was based around Will and Kate, so this was a nice change. I really like where this is headed. Your plot is flowing nicely and your characters are really well developed. This story has great potential, good luck!