Nice layout, just change the font color, it's very hard to read. And wow; you jumped right into the plot. At first I thought that she was prostitute, but then I changed my opinion to believe she was a sex slave or something. My first suspicion later proving right. I really like how nicely this is written, at least for such a dark topic. It's obvious Shana is in a desperate situation, but you didn't push pity on the reader, and you actually allowed your character to defend their actions, and let your audience deem them the victim. Overall I really liked this, it's a wonderful and sadistic read in a form. Nice job.
I'm really wondering where this is going. I have so many questions right now. Why is she in the car with the man? How did she get there? I thought it was a pretty good first chapter. And the summary and title catches your eyes. Anyways I hope u keep writing!:c
And wow; you jumped right into the plot. At first I thought that she was prostitute, but then I changed my opinion to believe she was a sex slave or something. My first suspicion later proving right.
I really like how nicely this is written, at least for such a dark topic. It's obvious Shana is in a desperate situation, but you didn't push pity on the reader, and you actually allowed your character to defend their actions, and let your audience deem them the victim.
Overall I really liked this, it's a wonderful and sadistic read in a form. Nice job.