Six Balloons - Comments

@The Authoress

Hey there, thank you so much for the comment. I really took a dive into the unknown with this story and the type of narration you used. I'm happy you understood why I capitalized those words specifically.

I understand how this story can be vague and misleading, and considering how old this story is (almost 2 years old) I've decided to explain what was really happening (hopefully this won't ruin its magic).

This story was set in 1940's Nazi occupied Poland, when the anti-Semitic demonstrations by the German army were starting to be more violent. Karina's mother forgot to bring her documents with them, and were accused of being 'juden' (jews). You are right: Karina did get shot and died. Her mother? I won't ruin that much.

Again thank you for the comment, I truly appreciate it.

Reply from Comment Swap:

I'm not sure which story I was supposed to read for comment swap, but I thought this one was most interesting from the titles. :)

This is really well written! I love how Karina's POV is not just narration or what she sees, it's what is in her head, and I love how she is talking to her mom and the Sillyboots in her head as well, it leads us into her mind without being hassled by all the details of her surroundings.

I saw how you capitalized things that are deemed important to children from the way they are taught to view those things :D Money, Important Enough, These Days... these days ideas and concepts in children's minds that hold some sort of meaning, and you showed that so clearly and fluently. Children also have run-on sentences that lead from one point to another, which you showed. Two thumbs up!

One part that I didn't really see clearly was what was happening to Karina... that was left all to the imagination, and it could have been anything. Is she supposed to die in the end? That's what I felt from the way it ended and what led up to it. If that wasn't your intention then for scenes like these you would need a little more description of the scene (but maybe that's just me, lol)

Overall I loved it, and I will definitely recommend this :) Amazing work, you're really talented!!

This is a very amazing story, even though it is a bit confusing at some parts (but maybe that's because we can speak child anymore?). I simply love this story, it made me cry and absolutely devastated me at the end. I rarely cry and yet you have made me bawl with this story.

Keep up your writings, and I hope to see more of your work some day. Maybe in a book of your own?

Farewell, occulta.

Wow, this is amazing. It made me laugh, cry and get chills all at once. You're a very talented writer and the way you put your readers in the perspective of the little girl was very fascinating. I also like the fact that at first I wasn't sure what was going to happen, then it became very clear. Beautiful work, I love it. Truly touching and got to the point!

Wow, this was brilliant, you're very talented. Even just the description was fantastic, there's a very clear voice here and you carried it out flawlessly.

So this was really interesting; I like how you wrote from the little girl's perspective. I admit that I was confused at.first as to what was going on, but I think it clicked towards the end.
This was well written and very unique. Good work :)

I was hooked the moment I read the first paragraph. This is interesting to read and probably one of the best stories I've read in a while on here. (: