As The World Goes Down - Comments

celestial_royalty (100)

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Jeez it's like she's going through childbirth (ch 9). Someone just find a pressure point and knock her out

August 19th, 2014 at 01:01pm

Its_Sulley (100)

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@ MusicsSoul
Awww!!! Thanks!!! Ohhhhhmyyygershness! Honestly I wasn't so sure about my story at all!! Thanks!! hehe XD

October 2nd, 2012 at 05:05am

life.ruiners (100)

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this is so precious honestly it is. i read all of it today when i found it! i love watching friends turn into lovers, slowly, even though they both really do like each other but hid their feelings psshh. i can't wait for more!

October 2nd, 2012 at 04:44am

Shocking_Instability (100)

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You better hurry up.... TYPE FASTER WOMAN. I will beat you up >.< Don't think I won't.

July 17th, 2012 at 03:32am

nihilist.cryptid (200)

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Okay the idea is really quite good but, the paragraph's could be spaced and the scene with her getting her mechanics job should be italicized. Links aren't allowed in the actual chapter, just in the authors note, the story editors will take it down until it gets fixed. The overall grammar was really good. I hope you don't think I'm being annoying, it's just really good and I don't think it needs to be reported over small errors. :)

July 16th, 2012 at 08:46am