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This is an unusual and well written story and I can't wait to see where you take it - though I've just noticed that the last comments were from 2 years ago - so you may have finished writing it now. It is very face paced and honest. Although we haven't gotten to know the 'internal' Jasmine yet, I am eager to learn a little more about her and her likes/dislikes/hopes & dreams - assuming she has any, as her spirit seems quite broken from all she's endured.
I like your direct writing style, though am not in love with the font that you've selected, as I struggled to read it at times - though that could be due to my tired eyes! Overall, great work & I hope you do decide to continue it!

This is really interesting and I’m curious about what comes next. It’s a great layout and I love the font. This has some really good description in it, but I think it could be even better if I knew more about how the protagonist is feeling, like is she scared of the demons or do they make her angry etc. unless it’s supposed to be written like that in which case it reads pretty hardcore :) but I really did enjoy it, something different to what I normally read :D

This story is one of the many reasons why I love the comment swap feature; this is something that I normally wouldn't read but I am so glad that I've come across it. I like your layout and your font is very easy to read. I think you've got a great story about to be told and I can't wait to read it.

Totally off of what I'm really commenting for but what font did you use I love it!

Now what I'm really commenting for- I love the idea that I'm getting from it, it sounds quite interesting, I love the first chapter and I'm definitely recommending and subscribing! I love the layout and the image!

Hmmm, very interesting story. I like it. I can't wait to see where it goes. I'm assuming this first part takes place in Hell, unless you're playing mind games with me, but I'll assume it is. It's a cool interpretation. :D The paragraphing is a odd, though, the way you're breaking in the middle of sentences and all. But a great story. ^W^