It's Not Like It Hurt That Much - Comments

This is really cool. Your writing style kind of reminds me of William Faulker, especially in the first 2 chapters.
From what I can assume from the lack of recent comments, you haven't updated in a long time.
You should update this again! It's a promising story -- there are so many places it can go.
I encourage you to continue it, even if you've lost interest in it. It's your story, you can make it anything you want it to be!

A very interesting story, and a different perspective from the usual stories…i like it...a lot!!!…would be awesome if you update again :) keep up the awesome writing!

chapter five was. amazing

I didn't find the first chapter as confusing as one of the below commenters did. I enjoyed it. There are some grammar errors and a couple places where you missed a letter typing. So, I'd recommend reading over it and fixing some simple mistakes. From the first three or so chapters though, I have noticed that you have a good sense of character and dialogue, but I would recommend adding some description to break up long blocks of dialogue, to keep the reader in the setting, as well as the words.

Hello, I'm from the Comment Swap. The first chapter is kind of confusing and there's some incorrect grammar (ex: "The thing was, is" needs to be either was or is, not both) and there's some verb tense confusion--it needs to stay either past or present tense. Because this story is in the first person, I'm having a bit of trouble picking through it with all of the "you know"s and contemplation. It's harder to write inside someone's brain than just about their actions--I might suggest that you try to simplify it a bit. I also find it a little hard to believe the premise that Tony Stark is the one showing someone else how to express/feel love, but that's what fiction is for, I suppose. I do really like that it's not the typical "meet, fall in love, face hardships, come through it together" story and more of a "fell in love, screwed up, tried again" plotline. I will say that I absolutely love the line, "I don't care why you ran, or why you came back, because if you haven't noticed, I wasn't looking for you." It's perfect. You have a really good foundation here, just keep an eye out for grammar!

Hello dear reader. Xd The comment swap thingy brought me here and I have to tell you before hand that i'm not into those kind of fan fictions but I did read it and there's nothing I can tell you other than that this is well-written. Well, there's one thing you have to do, the first letter of each word of the title should be capitalized. That's all from me so bye. Xd

Hello dear reader. Xd The comment swap thingy brought me here and I have to tell you before hand that i'm not into those kind of fan fictions but I did read it and there's nothing I can tell you other than that this is well-written. Well, there's one thing you have to do, the first letter of each word of the title should be capitalized. That's all from me so bye. Xd

Hahah, very insightful story. You have a great capture of how Tony Stark really is; when I read the things he says I can imagine in my head his voice and face and everything! I loved his character in the movie, and I still like his wittiness in this story as well.

Awesome, great story.

You need to hurry up and write another chaoter! This is the first good Tony Stark fanfiction I have found, so hurry up!

Okay I've only read the first chapter but I already like it. You seem like a good writer and I just love the introduction you've given. It really makes you want to read on without revealing too much. Well done, I hope you keep going with it.

comment swap. I cant give any advice, because I couldn't find anything to advice you on. Only to keep going, please? I've never seen ironman so i wasn't really aware that people would write stories onthat. Well you learn stuff everyday. Anyways, from what I could tell theres no typos and such.The layout it cool I really love your origional character. It's easy to read, enjoyable to read and I really liked it.

I don't usually read fanfiction but I loved this. I loved the dialouge and the emotions I felt from the characters. You did a very good job and I don't think I have any advice in here you need. You're doing Ok to me and this story is great.

So I don't really know how to give you advice on this story because it's so perfect, so instead of my usual commenting ways, Imma make you a list:
-Love Ironman
-Love the Layout
-Love the GIF.
-Love the story
-Love the Spelling
-Love the Grammar
-Love the love
-Love your Original Character
-Love you
-Love how I'm officially subrscribed
-Love how you love me so much that your going to update as soon as possible!

Here from comment swap. I've literally never read a superhero fan fiction before. I feel kind of bad because I have no knowledge of Ironman...which is what this is right? I think I recognize RDjr from that.

So, fandom wise I can't really say too much. I'll focus on the story then since I did read the three chapters you have up. I really do like it. The story is interesting and I really like Annabelle Swan. She's a very cool main character. There weren't any grammar errors that I could see and you have a really great writing style.

Glad I got to read this!

I really am loving this story! can't wait for the next update!!