Wide Awake - Comments

This was a super interesting story! I really enjoyed your voice in this, it's a writing style I don't often see and thought was well done for the most part. I would just take some time to thoroughly edit so that grammatical or punctuation errors don't take away from the story. Keep writing! Great job!

I really love these kinds of stories, so I really hope you continue on with it. I've read so many books similar to this and they never get old because every single character in every single book has a different tale and it makes everything interesting, and also the way other people are portrayed. I also like how there's a sense of mystery, the way we don't know why Dylan is there, or really anything about her yet. I'd love to see her character development and watch (read?) her grow.

The style of writing in this story kind of reminds me of a book I just finished reading today. It's called More Then You Can Chew, it's about a girl with an eating disorder who is in a clinic with a bunch of other girls. Your writing is wonderful, I really enjoyed this!

I love the layout. Its nice, simple, and clean. The summary captivates me from the start and it makes me want to know why she is there. Although I don't know much about him, Carson has already caught me attention and is one of my favorites. (: Keep up the lovely writing!

I REALLY like this. I hope you keep going with it. I want to know why Dylan's there, if she "isn't crazy". As for the layout, I feel like the eye opening and closing is a little distracting, although it also might add to the whole thing. Especially how she can't sleep. But I might try just a picture of an eye, one that doesn't move. Either way, I love the story :D nice job all around.

First of all I love the layout! The picture even moves! Good job on that! I like the summary. It tells you things but not everything. Good job. You are descriptive. I can relate to Dylan. Instead of even numbers, I hate odd numbers. They bother me. I love this. I have to agree with someone else, I would like to have more background on Dylan. That may be something that you plan to let us in on later. That is fine! I cannot wait to see more!

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I really loved the summary, and the layout. I love me a good "am I crazy or not?" story, and this one is interesting and well written so I'm definitely hooked. *clicks subscribe button* Can't wait for more! (:

I really like this, its interesting. I don't know if the repetition is supposed to speculate that shes 'crazy/not crazy' if its part of the story, but i personally don't like it lol not trying to hate its just me. But this is different and im ready to see what happens. Maybe give us a little bit more background on Dylan. Its hard to relate to her.

I'm going to recommend :)