Golden - Comments

It's written well but obviously you lost interest since it's been a year since you updated. I feel like Finnick should of been explored more in the books. he's a cool character and getting deeper in his story would of added more to the books.

I hated the books but loved the movie, so forgive me, but my knowledge of the Hunger Games only goes as far as the first few pages of the second book. Apparently your narrator was a male from what I read down there. I do believe. I don't know. But if it is a male, he's rediculously feminine. I would have never guessed that he was a in fact a he. Also, I feel that you could have kept the kmowledge about president Snow and the capitol women for a later chapter to build the suspense, because I feel that you haven't given the amazing twist as much potential as it is worthy of. Other than that, I liked it. I mean it seemed mildly shallow, buy it's only the first chapter! Also, try to make the summary more hooking! A good summary goes a very long way.

Well I have only read the first Hunger Games book, and I don;t remember much so I don't know much about the characters. But either way it was a good way to start the story. It's one of those stories where you can read it without having to find the source of the original idea. Great job with that. The spelling and grammar is wonderful and the description and action is well balanced. Not too little not too much to bore me. Great job, please continue!

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Not a fan of the Hungergames so I'll just stick to the basics. The layout could be better, considering the background it faded and the main picture good be a hell of a lot better quality. The context of the chapter could be alot longer, maybe when you continue you can change my mind about the series. That means more explanation on your characters!

@ bvbarmy0714
Actually, that's not true. Mags is an old woman. Annie is much younger than Finnick. In Mockingjay, Finnick is roughly 24 while Annie is thought to be around 20-23.

i love this story but annie was an old woman from his district and yes i know its fan fiction but it just seemed a little off to me after reading the book and discovering she was an old woman other than that i love it

i love this story but annie was an old woman from his district and yes i know its fan fiction but it just seemed a little off to me after reading the book and discovering she was an old woman other than that i love it

I absolutely love the Hunger Games, I mean even though I only read the first book and saw the movie. I didn't get that deep into it and I usually don't like stories that run off of some one else's story, but I'm liking this one so far. Please continue!! And could you please read and comment on my story, "Playing With Fire"? Thankss c:

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Finally another story that begins in the point of view of a boy! Do you know what a rarity it is to find these, never minding the boy/boy slash? I mean with the pairing of a boy/girl. It's usually in the point of view of a girl, or by either of them switching and telling their own side. How rare and delightful to come upon one of these!

Aside from that, I'm not one for Hunger Games fan fictions. Hell, I haven't even read the books and didn't really enjoy the movie (don't unleash any fury!). But maybe with the continuation of this you can change my mind.