The Difference Between Growing Up and Getting Older - Comments

L'intera anteprima di questo layout è pulito . La sintesi c'è un errore .. si aggiunge uno troppe virgole. Non c'è bisogno di avere una virgola prima e così. La storia non è che molti errori e mi piace la sensazione grezza che esso emana . Non fata cappotto nulla ed è così che la vita è veramente. E ' duro e le cose sono merda - bene ... in una certa misura . La vostra rappresentazione di tutto questo è da capogiro . Questo è un buon lavoro , non sono solo sicuro se questo è un collage / collab di storie o che cosa ? Le foto erano un ottimo add -on ! buon lavoro!

The whole preview of this layout is clean. The summary there's a mistake.. you added one too many commas. There is no need to have a comma before and like that. The story doesn't have that many errors and I love the raw feeling that it gives off. It doesn't fairy coat anything and that's how life truly is. It's harsh and things are shitty-well...to an extent. Your portrayal of this all is mind-boggling. This is good work, I'm just not sure if this is a collage/collab of stories or what? The pictures were a great add-on! good job!

I enjoyed how real this was. You didn't ignore the fact that people openly judge, and that life is hard. There's no ridiculous, romantic chasing after a hobo.

Periodically I found some minor problems: left out punctuation, a misspelled word, 'a' instead of 'an'. But only minor things.

I really like the idea behind this. Was it meant to be individual stories, told one time? That's the only thing that confused me.

I hope you keep writing this. (:

Brought here by comment swap:
This is definitely not my type of story at all but it was very well written and very beautiful. It was just so real. I don't think I've ever read anything quite like it. Your characters are so realistic. I also love the pictures in the chapters! Very cute and a very nice touch. Definitely keep writing!

I really like the summary, especially the last two lines. I think they add a touch of humor somehow, while being descriptive of the story.

I think pictures aren't allowed within chapters on Mibba. Perhaps you could link to them in the author's notes instead?

I really love Tristan and Derek's characters. They're so interesting. Their pasts are very unique and detailed. They seem like real people, which I think is really hard to pull off.

Anyway, I really liked it and I'm going to subscribe. Keep writing!

~Comment Swap~
I admit this is not typically the sort of thing I read, but this was beautiful. So short, yet so full of emotion and real-ness. I felt like I was reading the introduction to someone's autobiography, haha. Every detail was well written, and it's such a realistic story that I'm sure so many people can relate to. The pictures added a nice touch, and again I'm impressed with your ability to convey so much feeling and story into such a short piece.

Comment swap brought me here ♥ The layout and pictures just pulled me into it. The pictures are just sooo cute and amazing :D If you ask me I think you should make this a series of one-shots :D It would be pretty cool! Keep writing :D

Xoxo
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