Words Are Left Unspoken - Comments

Hey so comment swap is the reason I'm here. but it is an Avenged Sevenfold story so I would have found it eventually.
I'm so happy it was an Avenged Sevenfold story because I saw them on Friday and I just love them and needed to read something about the amazing boys. I'm really happy you put Jimmy in the story to because even though I like Arin I still really love Jimmy!
I felt like the story was a little fast paced and that the girls were kinda mean. Like when they first meet the boys and their friend looks pissed off, they should have asked him if he was okay (well that's whet I would have done) but I still liked the characters and the story.
I'm hoping I've written enough for comment swap but if I haven't I'll just have to comment again.
bye!

Aww poor jimmy. That makes me all sad. Hiya, I'm from comment swap by the way and I am so thankful they finally gave me a fan fiction where I actually know who the people are :) I really like this so far and I'm gonna subscribe and I can't wait until the next chapter. Hope you update soon :)

since you commented on my story, which is greatly appreciated by the way I will comment on yours!

I like it! I can't wait to see where it goes! I'm looking forward to it!

Comment Swap, guilty as charged. :) So, um, not really a fan of Avenged Seven Fold (correct way to write that?) anyway, I love the layout colour, but it is a little hard to read after a while. Cute story idea although you have to be careful to make it your own honey. Characters are pretty good, but I agree with WoahBroWoah, your writing can get a little awkward at times. Don't take afghans in that though! You can only get better in time! Trust me, I used to be the same way :)

update soon please

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That awkward moment when I hate Avenged Sevenfold fanfic :s
Well, the layout is really weird, the color scheme makes my eyes hurt and comic sans is just... God, why does it even exist?!
Anyways, okay so your story seems cliché, I mean I've read so many stories resembling this one, that's why I hate A7X fanfic, it's all about the same thing, Idk, I cannot seem to find interest in your story, personally. Also, well yeah, the way you write is clumsy. Maybe have someone proofread it? So yeah, my honest opinion here and you're free to hate me, I'm okay with that.

ok, so you have a really great idea here with some decent characters, but your sentence structure is a little awkward in places, along with the general phrasing of some of the quotes. You have the right idea essentially, just a little bit of editing and word change and this'll be gold:)

I'm here from Comment Swap! :D
I like it a lot! And I LOVE A7X Some of the sentences were a little awkward, but other than that it's great! Nice plot. I like the characters and Eli will get over himself :D

Alez was very right lol. I feel sorry for the gal! Well, that's what she gets for not listening :P
Post more, please!
Subscribed <3

update soon please and thank you

Helllooo, I'm here via comment swap.
I don't usually read Avenged Sevenfold fics, so I have nothing to compare this to. From what I've seen so far, it's well written with just a few grammar and spelling mistakes here and there, but that's fine. It doesn't distract from the rest of the story. You're off to a great start with the dialogue also. I would just say keep it up and good luck with the rest.

-Jess xx

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I don't think I've ever listened to them, but the OCs don't know them either so I don't feel too bad! LOL. You have a great start here, and you're dialogue writing is very strong, it flows nice, and it sets up nicely as the scene moves on. Keep up the good work.

I think it's a great start :) keep going :)