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  • hellz_belle

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    WOOT!
    Three Cheers For Sweet Vengeance Delivered!
    Good For Ryker finally standing up to his father. Although I'm sure that action shall have recoil. Can't wait to see what happens.
    August 7th, 2012 at 10:41pm
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    WOOT!
    Three Cheers For Sweet Vengeance Delivered!
    Good For Ryker finally standing up to his father. Although I'm sure that action shall have recoil. Can't wait to see what happens.
    August 7th, 2012 at 10:41pm
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    WOOT!
    Three Cheers For Sweet Vengeance Delivered!
    Good For Ryker finally standing up to his father. Although I'm sure that action shall have recoil. Can't wait to see what happens.
    August 7th, 2012 at 10:41pm
  • hellz_belle

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    I will agree with Ryker the teacher was giving me the 'creepy' vibe too. I wonder what her role shall play in the master plan.
    I love how the life you have given to the character Ryker he's one of those characters where you can feel the pain he goes through and also have the sympathy in him as well as the assurance that he can get himself through the challenges he's faced with.
    These last four chapters have been amazing and I am very excited to see where you take this.
    August 6th, 2012 at 09:46am
  • hellz_belle

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    Liking where this is going.
    Nicely done.
    August 5th, 2012 at 06:33am
  • queenelizabeth

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    The summary was very intriguing and enjoyed the chapters, I think more with explanation would be great. I like the fact you introduced different aspects of the main characters life. So far though I am very interested so please carry on writing!
    July 30th, 2012 at 01:16am
  • thebodyeclectic

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    Comment Swap brought me here.

    I don't exactly know what's going on at the moment. When I read the summary, I expected something different from the story. It has potential though, so I'd like to see where you take this.

    Nice work, though.
    July 29th, 2012 at 10:10pm
  • hellz_belle

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    The chapter was an excellent piece of work.
    Nicely done.
    July 29th, 2012 at 05:21am
  • Shawna Sikora

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    I feel this story carries a lot of potential to it. It was very intriguing, however, and I really want to see where you go with it.
    July 26th, 2012 at 05:31am
  • hellz_belle

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    There are a lot of different ways you can approach this story. Take a look at your summary. This is kind of like the map of your story like this is how you want things to happen.
    The ideas may be fuzzy at first take a look at your main character Ryker, step into his shoes and ask yourself if you could have anything in an alternate reality what would it be and why?
    After that think of the consequences of striving for the objects received in the alternate reality. I'm really liking what I see.
    July 22nd, 2012 at 03:05am
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