Wooh go Mycroft! I like this chapter! :D There was a teeeny past tense mishap on the line "John hesitated as he felt the body beneath him stiffened" but otherwise its very very very good :D
My my Mycroft. what is indisputably a brilliant chapter of which you should be very proud, you have filled it with action and emotion and a lot more word with the suffix -tion that don't quite come to mind just yet, anyway a brilliant chapter by a brilliant writer who coincidently is a brilliant person also, can't wait to find out what happens next x S
Mycroft, this is really good! The hospital is scaring me a bit, but I like the way you've written John, and I'm looking forward to what's gonna happen in the next chapter :D
Mycroftmay i say that was Brilliant very well done, why do you doubt your self so much that was great you got shelock dead on and that plot wow LOVE IT xx keep writing and i'll keep reading just make sure Sherlock makes it out alive Ok?
Oh wow, this is so so good! I loved the way you described everything, and you've really got Sherlock's characteristics right, really looking forward to the next update! :)