Constant Recovery - Comments

Wow, this was perfect. You've managed to just blow me away in just a very few words. I can't think of exactly what to say. It was amazing. I loved everything about it, I loved the way you were able to switch tones so perfectly.

The layout of this intrigues me, with the car going off into the distance kind of thing. And the title tied in with it already makes me curious to what I’ll be reading, which I like since it’s piqued my interest already without even reading any of the actual story.

Chapter One:

Immediately, your opening sentence has piqued my interest further. Who is he and what has he done again that has clearly shocked the narrator? The narrator’s plea for wanting to help his brother struck a personal chord in me, and I liked that I was able to relate to the story in some way, which I feel lacks in stories I’ve read these days. That last line was cold but painfully true; it seemed and was a beautiful way to end it. Plus, it’s made me excited for what’s in the next chapter.

Chapter Two:

Wow, the tone to the first chapter is completely different, but the change of POV’s work seamlessly. It shatters through the darkness like a goddamn bullet. I’m not sure why I’m drawn to this line, but it’s my favourite throughout the entire piece and wow, I just love it. The relationship between the two brothers is definitely relatable and can be seen any type of relationship situation, so I liked that that part of the story could connect to others reading it. “Don’t, just don’t. This tugged at my heartstrings. It was such a simple phrase but you’ve managed to catch the emotions so perfectly.

There’s nothing I can honestly say you’ve done badly, or not up to standard. This was a beautiful piece of writing, and despite the shortness of the chapters, I thoroughly enjoyed this. I’m going to recommend it – hopefully they can see the beauty in this as I have.

This was incredible! The layout was perfectly simple yet intricate at the same time. I was amazed at how much passion and subject matter was in such a small amount of words. This was a pleasure to read and I could feel the pain the one brother feels for the other as if I were truly apart of the situation. "I don't know how long it is before I gather myself to speak, but it shatters through the darkness like a goddamn bullet." This line; oh, how I loved it. Your writing is extremely elegant and detailed. Job well done! (: