True Danger. - Comments

@ CptLollipop
Well, it's really only for the people that feel like they relate. I appreciate it, but if you don't understand that's fine.

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I read to chapter four, I really don't get this I'm sorry. Like it's so negative and there's not much of a story in the parts I've read or if there is it isn't till later chapters. The chapters for Lea perspective are really interesting in concept.

This story mostly just made me feel uncomfortable like all the self hate. I feel like the short chapters hold the story back.

I don't know I guess this type of writing just isn't for me, but your writing itself as far as grammar and spelling goes is solid.

I can't get over how this story genuinely feels like it's about my life.

Even now, that I'm out of school. Nothing's changed. I still feel the same way I did then. I still have that voice that puts me down and then tries to pick me up again.

Excellent job. I love this. I can't wait for the next update. :) keep it up.

I really think it helps sometimes admitting things to others like this. It's a story, very informal, but well written at the same time. But somehow I feel like I've read your diary or something. Keep it up girly, and if you ever need someone to talk to, whether it be a middle of the night break down, or just a little self doubt, don't ever hesitate to message me. <3

God. This story gets to me. I love it.

Oh Eli. :/

The way Lea speaks gives me the chills. .-.

I love this. Keep it up

This story hits me in a way that not many do.

I feel as if I AM Eli. As if Lea's saying this to me. Hell, in a way, she's with me. And has been.

This story is every teenager's story.

Some have it harder than others.

But this, this is hauntingly beautiful.

Wow. The last line to Eli's intro was powerful and it made goose bumps move up my arms. Kudos. You're really nailing this stuff on the head, I know what it feels like to feel like Eli. Please do keep it up, it deserves recognition. (:

I think this is really interesting and I hope you continue to develop it. There are a few grammar issues - mainly some punctuation and the wrong form of your/you're - but those shouldn't be hard to fix.