Hello! Comment swap thingy here. It says this a fan fiction but I couldn't tell what of. That's a good thing though, it opens it up to readers. I noticed in chapter one you didn't use a question mark where it was clearly needed. Sometimes you confused words a bit, like in chapter three you somehow ended up with "Then this so call happens Georg" which doesn't make much sense. Just a quick run through will sort them out. You writing style is very unique and brilliant, but sometimes a little confusing. I did enjoy this though!! xx
January 29th, 2014 at 10:32pm