Thinking of You - Comments

I was also brought here by comment swap! I don't actually know who John O'Callaghan is - but this was still pleasant to read. Short and sweet is good, and this had a lot of character and description, as well as the dialogue to enforce the actions between the characters.

I thought I recognized the guy in your picture. :) I saw The Maine in concert a few years ago, and they were pretty awesome!
But I like this, it was really cute and sweet. I loved the philosophy about the moon, and the whole Joe Dirt allusion in the first chapter. And I think it was cool the way you described the way she thought he was smarter than her. This is a good start, keep going. :)

I was brought here by comment swap!
Omg you don't know how happy i was when i saw that it was gonna be a John O'callaghan fan fiction. lol anyways, this is great so far! i love your use of big vocabulary. you did repeat a little here and there, but it's totally fine! I LOVED IT. subscribing to the story (: this is amaizing, don't stop writing! i enjoyed every bit so far!!

Omg I completely forgot about the defult veiw. Sorry, =(

@ eminems_stan93
Thanks for the tips! I've been meaning to change that layout but I kept on forgetting... It's a ton better now though. It was a bit hard to read, I do admit, if it really bugged you you could have used the default layout though...

Comment swap.
I hate being a whinging bitch in swaps but I couldn't read any of your story because of the layout. I don't care too much for them unless they make the story hard to read. I think you have chosen a difficult layout toread against. I couldn't see the text, however I managed to read bits and pieces but what I have seen is not really worth commenting about. I think you might need to change it because a lot of people are really thingy about layout and stuff. Sorry. :(