Shake It Out - Comments

okay seriously, I just found this story- might have seen it earlier but never read it since it hadn't been updated in a while- don't tend to read them then because I just get sad when it ends and i'm left hanging

But damn! I love love love this story and I soooooo hope that you'll get to updating this more often
Harris is awesome! it's just perfect that she's like sassy and just badass.. though- telling James to look to another girl instead of Lily, did he turn his sights on her instead?? hope not! gosh, I hope Black will somehow win her over

pleeeeaaaase update this soon again <3

@ Haylie Jaed
Oh, my god you have no idea how much you have just made my week. Thank you! I think you may have rekindled my writing passion, believe it or not. :)

i looooooooooooooooove this story
update soon please kdfjskljflskdjflsjkf

I hail from the land of Comment Swap! Surprised? Me, too.

Though I must admit, I was very excited to find myself faced with a Marauder era story. Skip back to age twelve, before I knew that fan fiction existed, and I was writing one of these. It started me on my journey! So before I say anything else, let me say thank you for the trip down memory lane. =)

I read the last chapter, because I think if people want their writing criticised, it's best to look at the newest piece posted. And for you, I simply have nothing to complain about.

Your spelling and grammar are practically flawless, and that was a huge breath of fresh air. Reading this was like reading something that had been professionally because it flowed so well and was very well written. There were no boring parts that I wanted to skip through, no intense description that made me want to shoot forward. I absolutely loved it.

And even just reading this one chapter, I got a pretty good feel for all of the characters. I think you know their personalities extremely well and are really good at getting them across to your readers.

All in all, I thought the chapter was absolutely perfect. You've obviously got a great story going here, and I hope people continue to read and enjoy it. =) Good luck!

@ DancesWithSugarCubes
Ah thank you it means so much! :)

"Pads? Huh? Is Potter's nickname tampons?" Oh god, I died. I don't usually laugh out loud when reading, but that had me going. I must say, your writing has improved a lot since I was on mibba. I love your sarcasm, it feels really genuine and actually reminds me of myself when I was that age :D Woooooot can't wait to read more! :)

E P Kent:

Comment Swap: I read through three chapters of your story (a rarity when doing comment swap) and have to say I really enjoy your vulgar take on the Potter world and i love your protagonist; shes so real. Your writing is pretty good too, not a lot of description but you never really needed it in my opinion. There are a few parts where editing would serve you well, but not nearly enough to detract from the story. The reason i stopped reading was when i hit the infamous Mibba 'love wall'. where I realize its just another soppy love story. I appreciate romance, but it needs to be a backdrop, not a focal point. That all being said this is a great story and you should keep working hard.

Comment Swap: I read through three chapters of your story (a rarity when doing comment swap) and have to say I really enjoy your vulgar take on the Potter world and i love your protagonist; shes so real. Your writing is pretty good too, not a lot of description but you never really needed it in my opinion. There are a few parts where editing would serve you well, but not nearly enough to detract from the story. The reason i stopped reading was when i hit the infamous Mibba 'love wall'. where I realize its just another soppy love story. I appreciate romance, but it needs to be a backdrop, not a focal point. That all being said this is a great story and you should keep working hard.

Hello, Comment Swap!
It's definitely written like an angry teenager speaks, which I rather like. Just be careful that it doesn't go overboard and end up in all cliches. I love female characters that aren't falling all over themselves to be noticed by boys, so I rather like Harris!
Keep it up!

oh goodness, the marauders. they are honestly my favorite part of the harry potter series, especially Sirius. it really made me happy to get paired with a story about them! I've never read any stories about them. I'm really interested to see where you take this story - you have great character development and I'm interested to see more about the plot. It'd be really cool if you could include what happens when Voldemort starts to come to power! overall, good work!

I love this. :D You need to update now! :P

Agh, sorry. Just read the last three chapters and ungggghhhgrf gflasjgbn;agsagbkJ.
all my my feels. Also, some pretty good one-liners. Harris is halurrious.
And Lupin. Lupin, my love. I just... fd;jbga.
Sorry. I love this and you.
Proceed. <3

I liked the chapter :)
It's a good way to open up the characters and their personalities.
You banner is pretty good.
Personally I'm not one for banners with actual people and stuff.
But that's because I like imagination to go with characters.

ok I actually googled Fellatio and got so embarrassed I went into my history and deleted it.
I just wanted to share that.
This chapter was pretty funny.
I'm looking forward to the next one.

The "Gag me with a spoon" comment had me laughing for a few minutes Im not gonna lie XD Love it, update soon!

I like this a lot!

Love this story! I hope you can update soon :D

Sirius Black fanclub? That's hilarious!
Btw cheese on toast isn't that bad! If it's cheezewhiz.
This Slytherin is pretty smart.
Maybe she should be in Ravenclaw.

love the story :)

Update!